christine king Posted June 2, 2017 Report Share Posted June 2, 2017 Another great chapter, I'm loving this story you make it so exciting and suspenseful. 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bijou Posted June 2, 2017 Report Share Posted June 2, 2017 Great up date did Heath shoot Calvin or is this another one of your twists where Calvin will have shot Heath 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pembie Posted June 4, 2017 Report Share Posted June 4, 2017 (edited) Ok.......Hmmmm....err......ok.......what? Yes I think I would have to choose the option of dying Not only would it be wrrong but how would one get turned on enough to be able to perform good enough to please a nutjob like Ducky? I guess it pays to be gay in prison so maybe Kyle can just think of Aaron Josh though I'm not sure. Shame the drugs are wearing off now maybe they should have gotten totally stoned and not able to stand beforehand And Brax with his deluxe real-feel dildo, harness, and horse’s bridle. Next chapter are we going to have a scene with Brax and Ricky puttting it to good use? They could both do with abit of fun down at the ranch How did you think of that? One things for sure isn't a boring job waitressing for Brax... haha Maybe I'm abit sick but I found Smithy having a song about rape for his ringtone funny Heath might be dead we don't know what happened after he was shot so that video message could be a trick Edited June 4, 2017 by pembie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ludub Posted June 4, 2017 Report Share Posted June 4, 2017 11 minutes ago, pembie said: Ok.......Hmmmm....err......ok.......what? Haha! Sorry if I shocked you! I did put that big red warning for a reason! 12 minutes ago, pembie said: Not only would it be wrong but how would one get turned on enough to be able to perform good enough to please a nutjob like Ducky? I guess it pays to be gay in prison so maybe Kyle can just think of Aaron Josh though I'm not sure. That's a good question. I'm not sure it would exactly be classed as being 'turned on' but fear could play a big part? 20 minutes ago, pembie said: And Brax with his deluxe real-feel dildo, harness, and horse’s bridle. Next chapter are we going to have a scene with Brax and Ricky puttting it to good use? They could both do with abit of fun down at the ranch How did you think of that? One things for sure isn't a boring job waitressing for Brax... haha Just remembered that scene with Smithy and Ricky way back at the beginning and thought it would be funny to bring that back in. Who knows where I get my ideas from?! 22 minutes ago, pembie said: Maybe I'm abit sick but I found Smithy having a song about rape for his ringtone funny Have you listened to that song?! (from the Reservoir Dogs soundtrack, I think?) Seriously disturbing! 23 minutes ago, pembie said: Heath might be dead we don't know what happened after he was shot so that video message could be a trick You'll have to wait and see. The good news is you won't have to wait too long. I have the next chapter half written already! Thanks for giving me a laugh! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pembie Posted June 4, 2017 Report Share Posted June 4, 2017 (edited) Half written alright your a writing machine.. Seen Reservoir Dogs can't say I remember much about it Maybe I was that disturbed I blanked it Edited June 4, 2017 by pembie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Ranger 1 Posted June 4, 2017 Report Share Posted June 4, 2017 Josh and Kyle in another Catch-22 situation.Will they cross another moral line or will they find another way?And Brax no closer to finding Heath with the Feds still nowhere to be seen... 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted June 4, 2017 Report Share Posted June 4, 2017 Great chapter Wonder what's really in that box Smithy gave Brax. Brax still has no info on Heath or if he is in fact alive. Hmm Poor Kyle and Josh are in quite a pickle. Update again soon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bijou Posted June 5, 2017 Report Share Posted June 5, 2017 Kyle and in yet another situation these guys certainly haven't got it easy now have they however I'm not Kyle could live with himself with either outcome of this situation Can't wait to read more 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pembie Posted June 5, 2017 Report Share Posted June 5, 2017 (edited) Your very talented at writing action scenes I thought that was brilliant.. I think you capture the darkened world of prison atmosphere prefect Well to the best that I imagine it to be anyways. Dimitri if I'm honest I'm not too sad to see go what a totally useless Fed agent he was Over time I was questioning if he wasn't just a tad cuckoo mental Mark being Ducky's trained dog was clever, because in the end he had turned out to be his very own attack dog. I wasn't expecting that I thought Mark was too weak and quiet Its always the quiet ones you have to watch though.. Spoiler Heath's death I think there's a twist there like buried alive maybe Well that was a slightly to exciting piece of bedtime reading for me Its made me feel wide awake Edited June 5, 2017 by pembie 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ludub Posted June 5, 2017 Report Share Posted June 5, 2017 6 minutes ago, pembie said: Well that was a slightly to exciting piece of bedtime reading for me Its made me feel wide awake Haha! As long as it doesn't give you nightmares! 7 minutes ago, pembie said: Your very talented at writing action scenes I thought that was brilliant.. I think you capture the darkened world of prison atmosphere prefect Well to the best that I imagine it to be anyways. Awww, thanks! They're quite difficult to write because they're usually between two men and that means there's a lot of 'he did this to him' stuff. It can be hard to make it clear who you're talking about. Really glad you enjoyed it! 9 minutes ago, pembie said: Over time I was questioning if he wasn't just a tad cuckoo mental He had spent 2 years in prison as an undercover agent. Who's to say he hadn't gone completely cuckoo?! lol! 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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