Tasha Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 haha, it'll be funny is Martha kidnapped Val Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanda Vale Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 Sadly it is not Martha or will I say Lucky her!!! Thanks for the great comments Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanda Vale Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 Here is my next chapter hope you like it hope it puts you at eaze about Val's situation xxx CHAPTER 8 Somewhere near Summer Bay VALERIE: You won’t get away with this Cooper! Turns her face away from Johnny JOHNNY: I already have Gives a smug smile VALERIE: They will find me Johnny! JOHNNY: Not alive love Smiles and slams the door behind him VALERIE: You won’t get away with this Johnny Starts crying The caravan park (Peter, Fitzy and Jack) PETER: I wonder what Brad knows? JACK: I’ll go to the school and ask him what happened here PETER: No let me go FITZY: Okay, Jack lets check the scène for more evidence Summer Bay High – Main Corridor (The students watch as Peter enter and walk towards where Sally, Brad and Dan is standing; They wonder why he is looking so angry!) PETER: So Brad we found your cell phone at a crime scene SALLY: Now Peter don’t be silly… PETER: Why is there blood all over your shirt? DAN: Now Peter you haven’t even heard his story! PETER: Well we can take this one down town BRAD: Rather go to the hospital Peter! PETER: Why, is Val there? BRAD: No, I found Mitzi she has been shot that is why my shirt is covered in blood and you found my cell laying there you can check the last…. PETER: Okay come with me DAN: Peter where are you taking him? PETER: To the hospital, to see if Mitzi knows anything about where Val is SALLY: Why does Brad have to go along? PETER: So that Mitzi doesn’t feel like a suspect just yet BRAD: Let’s go Peter (Brad and Peter exits the building leaving the kids staring at them) SALLY: Get to class kids, hurry now. HOSPITAL (Peter and Brad enter) RACHEL: Hey Brad, Peter PETER: How is Mitzi? RACHEL: She is still unconscious BRAD: How bad is it? RACHEL: It is hard to say she lost a lot of blood, if u didn’t arrive when you did she would not be here! PETER: Can we go in to see her? RACHEL: Sure but don’t stay to long PETER: Thanks Rachel Mitzi’s room (Peter and Brad enters) PETER: He sees that Mitzi is lying there helpless the machines breathing for her and the monitor for her heart beat Wow she looks bad! BRAD: She does Mitzi’s machine flat lines PETER: Rachel!! Storms out the room BRAD: Mitzi don’t die on us RACHEL: Enters Brad I’m sorry but you have to leave Brad exits Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vale4eva Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 DUM DUM DUM! You cant leave us there! lol I cant belive its Johnny thats taken her, it never actually clicked that it might have been him (Silly me. lol) Hope Mitzi doesnt die. And Jack needs to rescue Val! (Wups! I nearly wrote Martha instead of Val then. Soz, its a reflex lol) Looking forward to reading about Martha in the upcoming few chapters *wink wink, nudge nudge* lol Great chapter, looking forward to the next one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanda Vale Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 I cant belive its Johnny thats taken her, it never actually clicked that it might have been him Well thats the piont nobody thought that Talking about Martha * wink wink* lol Thanks for the great comment that made my day so briliant Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sally_Fletcher Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 BRAD: Mitzi don’t die on us Awe that's so sweet. If I had a heart I would have cried. It's real good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanda Vale Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 If I had a heart Of course you have a heart I'm your friend lol Thanks for the comment Brally especially for you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
*~Abi~* Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 just caught up this fic is really good i look forward to reading more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 Great Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanda Vale Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 Thanks Abi and Zetti! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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