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Yay two updates! That was beautiful Jess, really superb. Laughed my head off at the Sara/Maddie war over movies and how Mattie was so nasty, I could just feel her hurting. I was dying for Luc to send Sarah home and ask her why she was being like that. Loved the shopping stuff, I can really emphathise with going back to a small town life after living in the city because I've done it and its hard. The city is such a huge buzz I really felt for Maddie but then of cpurse Sara had to come and ruin it. I guess in her own way she's as lost as Mattie is but still she could have sensed to keep her nose out. Loved the final scene with Cassie where Matilda finally said what was on her mind, gorgeous, so well written a real tear jerker. Where will you go from here? I really don't know and I know better than to second guess you so I'll wait patiently for the next update. Great writing, will I be pushing it if I say 'please write more soon?'

No worries chick. I still think my mum made her version up though: 'Nobody loves me, everybody hates me I'd better go and eat some worms, the first one was slimy, the second one was slimy, the third one gave me germs...' she used to sing that so often when I was growing up...still does actually

At the authors note! Oh Frank why did you have to go and ruin it? I loved it ILM. Loved Sally and Lance, he's as innocent as her. 'Jumping jellybeans'...where do you think of these things from? I loved the touching moment between Sally and Steven aswell when he realised they could help each other, that was lovely and the silly songs and the commercial. I always knew a different version of that song though...think my Mum must have made it up! Pippa's words to Carly were so fitting aswell and it was nice to see Carly being accepted. Great chapter but Frank's warning at the end really chilled me out...great writing.

I'm unplugging everything in the house every night and installing circuit breakers everywhere, that scared me to death. It was on an extention lead so I think it was overloaded, I'm gona be so careful from now on. The problem is every plug in our house has an extention lead on it...

I feel so freaked out! The lamp in my bedroom has just blown itself up.... My computer desk is right next to my bed and the lamp was on it, I'd just turned the computer off and was going to go to sleep and got up to turn the light off. It kind of sparked, fell onto my pillow, then sparked again, about five times and I stood there in complete shock screaming my head off...then it caught the end of my pillow and smoke started coming from it so I turned the plug off and put a blanket on the corner of my pillow that had started to go on fire. The lamps outside in the bin now but I'm so freaked out, if I hadn't have got up to turn the light off my head would have been on the pillow the lamp landed on. I feel sick now, I'm shaking really badly...ugh that was horrible!

Okay the debate has been going on for a bit now both in here and behind the scenes over whether to disable the post count in the fanfiction forum. Whilst the majority view is that the posts should count there is a general agreement that nobody wants people to boost their post count by replying to stories they haven't actually read. We're not discouraging people from replying to storys but we do want to encourage people to post more detailed reviews. This will be beneficial on more than one level. It will help the librarians decipher who is actually replying and who is spamming and it will also benefit the authors. We appreciate that sometimes you don't have time to give a detailed review for a story and that a quick response is better than none at all but if you're following a story you usually post more than once so I struggle to believe that you'd be pushed for time on EVERY reply you make. Therefore we're asking people to try and think about their reviews in more detail. We're not asking for long essays or the type of reviews given in the challenges, just pick out one or two points in the chapter that you really liked. A couple of lines of great description, dialogue that gripped you or made you laugh, a character or pairing that is really well written. Anything really that tells the author what they're doing well and also keeps us from thinking people are using this forum to bump their post counts. For some things to think about in your reviews I'm posting the Review Guidelines devised by Sevenpuddings for the fanfiction challenges. We're not expecting anybody to follow the whole framework but hopefully it will give you a few things to think about when posting a review. Review Guidelines 1. Was the character believable? Were you able to picture it in your mind and hear the character saying things? Do you feel that the author managed to tap into the character to make it their own? Was the interaction between the characters (if applicable to the story) believable? 2. Were there any lines or moments that stood out to you? Why did they stand out? 3. Did the author use descriptive language and/or emotive language to draw you into the story? 4. Overall, was the story appealing to you? Why/Why not? 5. What do you feel could be improved by the author? Do you have any suggestions for them? Thank you for everybody's co-operation with this

Thanks for the reviews guys. I'm not feeling very confident with my writing at the moment so it means a lot that people liked this story. Thank you to everyone who commented.

Phew! So glad you liked it Tainted Muse, it's took me long enough to get round to and I've re-written it so many times! ILM the one shots will be on these two characters, based around their meeting after their counselling sessions, if I ever write them!

thanks for the reviews. For now its a one shot, like I say I've started writing one shots around the same subject. If I ever get round to finishing them this'll become a series of one shots....if that makes any sense to anyone.

World Undone grabbed me straight away Jess, I just found it really intriguing and deep but with so many levels. They're all good suggestions though. The plot sounds great...can't wait!

Glad you liked it Belle. Reading back through this last night I actually became quite impressed because Jess and I have massively different writing styles but I honestly don't think you can tell who wrote what. I'm really loving combinations at the moment, it's so much less hassle than writing a story alone!

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Wow Jess. You have every right to be proud of that chapter, I loved it. Great writing. Tasha's right, Ric and Anna are very cute and the chemistry between them just sizzles...love the way you write it. Great chapter.xx

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Em that was hysterical! I love how you never do what is expected of you, great story, I didn't see their little threesome coming at all. Bold Cassie suggesting it, who'd have thought? Great oneshot!

You know how much I want you to continue. Sorry if I can't get on here very often at the moment to say so but you just better carry on with this...alright? Fantastic chapter, loved the insight into Carly and I thought Steven and Frank's reactions were spot on. I do feel sorry for Kane in this and I hope Scotty gets his comuppance. Where's Sal though? Hope she's okay. Loved Milko's hat changing colour, its things like that which make this story so good. Therefore you must continue...or else!

...because I'm marvellous! Its actually a really easy job to move the stories, only takes two minutes so it probably does actually take longer for you to PM the links. They're useful when it comes to finding a story but I already knew where these where so it wasn't a problem.

Just read the last few chapters...wow! Another happy ending, I really didn't think you were going to what with the suicide and character death warnings but I'm pleased you did. another beautiful story.xx

Don't worry about links and stuff but I would need the catalog entries if you can PM them to me? Cheers. No hurry though, just when you have time...next year then? xx

Aw, lovely happy ending. You were right ILM, not what I expected but nicer still, good o Dani, letting go. I was convinced she'd destroyed everything though. Another great story. Do you want me to move it over for you now its complete?

Sorry ILM took my time getting round to this but I'm already hooked. Love how you're intertwining past with present and Dani's dream...how spooky. I'm really intrigued now. Some superb writing a description as always. I'm a bit too tired tonight to pick bits out but I might try and get round to it at a later date. Great stuff though, look forward to your next update.xx

Em your post got me thinking. What about having a thread on writer's tips? Like the tutorial thread in the creativity and multimedia section. Kind of like an online writing lesson; anyone can give their advice on writing techniques, structure, SPAG etc, such as your structure post in here. It would benefit younger writers or writers for whom English isn't their first language but I think any writer can benefit from techniques that might improve their writing. It wouldn't take anything away from Nicole's proof reading thread, because proof reading would still be needed, it just might give writers a bit more confidence. It would also be somewhere you could ask questions and receive advice back. What do people think?

Wow that was great Em, really well written.

Well if reviews inspire you to write then bring it on because I love this story and I'm made up you updated. Drama queen much? Seriously, unless you’ve worked the rush, you cannot understand the pain that it was. Hmm, why do I sense a bit of reality creeping into the story? Parker had taken it as we’d expected. Screamed about infidelity, threatened Cassie that karma would get her, then stormed out of the house. Out of our lives. Without Cassie mentioning once that maybe it was karma coming back to bite her. I was proud. The bitch has left the building...really well written, I can just imagine her totally ott reaction. Am I the only person gutted that Cassie didn't stick the boot in though? The little old lady made me laugh, she was so cute. The top stuff...grr for Sara, she's not quite the little innocent she pretends to be and one of these days Luke will see it, I have faith in you Jess, you'll right things before the end. Yay Cassie and Ric, they're pretty cute and also yay for Cassie and Matilda's friendship. “I know, but I couldn’t resist, Miss Spiteful, Doom & Gloom. It was too easy.” Only a best friend could get away with saying something like that. I love the way you create this really genuine friendship between them. Sometimes, I wondered why we were still friends. Other times, the reasons were slapping me in the face… or hugging me around the shoulders. loved that, great bit of writing. So in answer to your question, I loved it and I know I'm a complete hypocrite but will you kill me if I ask you to please update soon?

Megan Ashton/ Ashcroft...who knows what is meant to be! Again bad continuity on my part, I'll head in and change it. You can say what you like ILM but you wrote at least half of it and you're getting as good at writing bitchy Hayley as I am! I don't know whats up with me at the moment, I just don't feel like writing and everything I do write is just awful but hopefully with ILM staying on in this to help me out, we should manage a chapter fairly soon. Okay I just want to say a really huge thank you for so many lovely reviews. It makes me feel even more guilty that I'm not writing much at the moment but your comments are so much appreciated. I'm glad everyone does still like this and is prepared to wait for me to update. I've just reread the whole story start to finish and all of the reviews it's received and I'm feeling all warm and fuzzy at the moment...you never know I might even feel inspired to write. Seriously, thanks for the comments though. Hopefully I won't keep you waiting too long.