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What a touching, and very sad chapter! Loved it. Everyone is written so well here. All the speeches were beautiful. You had me in tears. Zac hitting the bottle is not a good sign but pretty understandable really the scene where Charlie got into bed with him nearly broke my heart. Feel very sorry for VJ and Charlie too. Great chapter! Looking forward to the last one x

Awww, poor Kyle. Not an easy childhood at all No wonder he's so guarded about telling people stuff and so used to having people not care about him. It was nice that he felt comfortable enough with Tamara to open up to her. Looking forward to the next chapter x

Loved, loved, loved this Chapter, Red! So much going on here it's hard to know where to start... So I'll start at the beginning... I absolutely loved Chris' scene with Olivia and Billie. It's exactly what I would expect of him (and I really want one of those hugs! ). VJ and Leah's reactions were great too and very believable. I guess I'm hoping that VJ will come round and realise that he still wants to be with Billie, but it's a lot to get his head around, so I don't blame him if he needs time (or even if he doesn't). Olivia and Billie's scene was incredibly touching and heartwrenching at the same time. Beautifully written! I also loved the final scene with Hunter. Very brave of Olivia to go see him, and of Hunter to agree to see her. Very sad that it ended up that way. All in all, an exceptionally well written chapter! Really enjoyed it! Thanks Red!

Great chapter! Loved Kyle and Tamara's heart to heart. He is a very good friend. I'm not sure Casey would be that happy with Kyle's advice to his girlfriend, but he just told it like it is. Sometimes people need to break up for a while, and sometimes they need to break up altogether... Interesting that Kyle chose to open up to her and not to Phoebe. Wonder what he's going to tell her. Really looking forward to the next chapter x

It's something I really don't get about me In all my stories, I tend to make the ones I love suffer the most. Kyle, Josh, now Brody... poor boys. I guess you need to care about someone to care that they're suffering? That's just how I see Mason. Creepy creepy Mason, lol! Makes his chats with Raffy seem a little sinister, and that double date with Matt and Evie was just disturbing! Lol The maniacal laughter was very in keeping with my story Glad you're enjoying it! x

Oh no! Poor Kyle! I wonder if Ray is going to strike now?! Enjoyed Ray's amusement at watching the teens argue. Definitely more interesting than going to back to his tent on his own. And... Casey kind of proved Tamara's point in this argument really Looking forward to the next chapter x

Such a good chapter Red! Really enjoyed it. I thought VJ reacted well in the circumstances and did the sensible thing by getting out of there so he could calm down. I feel bad for pretty much everyone in this story. Billie shouldn't have lied to VJ and his family, but it's understandable, to say the least. As she said, VJ was everything that her experience in the gym wasn't. She still hasn't really dealt with what happened to her and has basically been running from the horror of it ever since. Now that she's told Irene the truth though, I hope she can get some help. I'm glad Irene was supportive once she told her. Matt and Evie were cute too, and Olivia still having a waitressing job and managing it in her wheelchair is interesting. I can see we're moving towards an Olivia and Mason pair-up here? Makes sense in the circumstances I suppose. Looking forward to the next chapter x

Haha! Yeah, a MickeyDs would go down well right about now, but he'd have to trust Justin, and he's already been chopped to bits by one brother! You know what they say, you're not paranoid if they really are out to get you. Glad you liked Kat's bit too. She does seem to be incredibly randy these days and willing to jump Ash's bones pretty much anywhere. Thanks for reading x

Thanks KittCatt! Glad you're enjoying it (You're partly to blame for this story so that's just as well! ) What Mason is doing is pretty disturbing alright, especially what he's doing to poor Evie, although Brody's having a terrible time too. As I said before, writing what is essentially a comedy about subject matter this dark is a bit weird. Hopefully Mason's inner dialogue while he's doing these appalling things is wacko enough to make it funny. That's what I'm aiming for anyway! Haha! You got that then?! Very subtle, eh?! Surely I can't be the only one that hates Kat?! She's just such an annoying character! It's gotten to a point now that I can't watch her anymore. Couldn't resist pointing out some of her more obvious character flaws though so I am enjoying writing this. I'll try to update again some time before next weekend x

Thanks Bijou, glad you're enjoying it Yep, both pretty wackadoodle really. I always find Kat's belief that she's a good cop pretty funny (along with her massively over-inflated ego). If I didn't dislike her so much, she'd be a pretty good comedy character. This is just a view of what's going on behind that smug smile of hers. Thanks for the feedback, Red!

Thanks Kristen! Glad you enjoyed it. Mason is certainly twisted and Brody's right to be scared of him. Mind you, he might just get distracted by his own reflection in a shiny surface and lose interest in murdering him, haha! Thanks as always for the feedback.

Brilliant! I have loved this story from start to finish! Just so funny! I love all your descriptions of Evie's 'lady garden'! Quite an extensive use of euphemisms, haha! Loved Mason wanting to hold hands, Brody and Justin's fear of Evie's wrath, and Evie thinking that Mason was a dirty little perv! Nate's amusement at the prospect of Evie delivering puppies made me chuckle too. Mason being completely oblivious to the fact that he was a dog, despite everyone calling him Buddy.... Raffy and Hope? Good names for puppies! haha! Thank you so much Pembie! x

Wow! So the cat is out of the bag! Looking forward to seeing what happens in the next chapter. A difficult situation all round! Loved Matt and Evie. Much like in the show, I love how natural they are with each other here, even when they're being a bit awkward. Glad they're getting it together. Feel sorry for Olivia here. That was a little tactless of VJ really. She's bound to be self-conscious enough without VJ pointing her dress out to her. Loved Dex and Lottie's scenes too. Very sweet, and really nice that Billie chose to open up to her. Sometimes it can be easier to talk to someone you don't know that well than the people who are close to you. An impartial ear can be really helpful. Glad she was able to give Billie the little shove she needed

Oh dear! Poor Hunter! hope he'll be alright

Oh my! Is it bad that all this talk of cheese has just made me really hungry?! Haha! This is brilliant! Loved Evie begging for bones and romping around the place chasing sticks (and Brody just putting her strange behaviour down to her being a girl). Irene just being happy to have a day out! Leah not getting the chance to be her normal naggy bossy self, and Decker 'double deckering' them, lol! Loved the line about 'chocolate teapots' too! Also really loved Matt fantasising about his 'foot long'! Comedy gold! Thanks for this Pembie Feeling a bit down today so I really needed this! Lol!

Great chapter! Loved matt and Ellie as always, so so cute! Worried about Hunter and Olivia now. The spots of blood sounds ominous...

Aww, what a lovely chapter! Really glad you're continuing it! Kyle and Rocco are so cute together and I love the relationship with Kyle's mum. Sad little scene with Heath at the graveside too, and glad that Sasha and Casey made up (nice that it was because of something Kyle said when he was alive ). Looking forward to the next chapter x

Sorry Billie doesn't have more of a starring role in this story then! haha!

Haha! thanks hward! You'll just have to wait and see! Like the theory though!

Thanks Pembie! You got that subtle hint about Kat then?! And I thought I'd hidden my contempt for her oh so well! Haha! Glad you liked that line about supporting Brody every ste..., I thought it was funny (but maybe I'm just cruel?! Haha) I saw a scene with Mason in it a couple of days ago (UK pace) where Evie took her top off for no reason and then the camera spent ages showing us long lingering shots of Mason's little muscly body. It was very weird (and very unnecessary). It put the Diet Coke ad in my head though, so I guess I can thank whoever edited that scene for the inspiration. They do make him seem quite creepy at times. Taking that 'skin crawly' quality that he has to the next level is just a lot of fun to write! Glad you're enjoying it x

Thanks Red! Evie's not the brightest spark here, but then he has been drugging her, day in, day out, so it would be understandable that she's a bit foggy. All getting very dark. Will Brody be able to stop him though, that is the question!

Thanks KittCatt! As much as I hate Kat (as you well know! Lol!), I couldn't resist having a pop at her here. She's probably the only other person as in love with herself as Mason so maybe she's the right person to get inside his head? Thanks Kristen! Glad you're enjoying it. Mason has become very unhinged pretty quickly here. He is very fun to write, haha! Aww! Thank you Jarlie! That's so lovely of you to say. You're making me blush! Thanks Bijou! I don't actually watch American Horror Story. I had this discussion with Pembie before, but I don't really watch a lot of horror movies, which is probably surprising given some if the stories I've written (you might like Hunted). my mind seems to steer me in that direction a lot of the time so I'm not sure what that says about me! Haha! Glad you're enjoying it! Again, I really appreciate you all taking the time to read and comment. You guys are great!

Everyone's getting a bit jumpy now, aren't they? Pity no one's really taking Casey seriously. I wonder what'll happen when the boss gets there Looking forward to the next chapter x

Aw! Thanks Pembie! I really appreciate that! I'm glad that you found it funny! It is meant to be a comedy, albeit a very dark one! I do tend to write comedy on the straight side though so maybe it's a bit hard to tell? haha! Mason is such a complete and total tit in this that it should be hard to take him seriously. At least, that's what I'm hoping for. And yeah, Brody having his legs cut off shouldn't be funny, but for some reason it kinda is. (At least, I found it funny - does that make me bonkers like Mason?! haha!)

Haha! I don't even know where to start with this one! Thanks for the laugh Pembie! Proper wackadoodle as you might put it yourself Loved Alf's misgivings about being Batman / Decker's butler, and Justin getting upset about the amount of 'quality time' he's spent on the couch with Mason unknowingly. Brody and Tori both having lifelong obsessions with the Batman, lol! Brilliant! And Mason doesn't even know he's a dog! Poor Evie, may be pregnant with puppies! Love this!