Red Ranger 1 Posted October 11, 2016 Report Share Posted October 11, 2016 Ray still comes across as potentially dangerous, even if he does just seem to be the small fry.Intrigued to see where you take this. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ludub Posted October 11, 2016 Report Share Posted October 11, 2016 Interesting insight into Ray. Two kids to feed? I'm intrigued to find out who he's working for and what they want with Kyle. Stuffing him in the boot of a car suggests that they really don't have good intentions. The girls certainly seem to have sorted everything out, while the boys all seemed a bit useless really The camp sounds like it looks pretty nice too with all the fairy lights. Looking forward to the next chapter. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted October 11, 2016 Report Share Posted October 11, 2016 (edited) Great chapter intrigued to find out more about Ray. The camp site sure sounds nice Update again soon Edited October 11, 2016 by Kristen Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted October 11, 2016 Author Report Share Posted October 11, 2016 Awesome chapter Liked the insight into Ray Looking forwards to the next chapter Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ludub Posted October 12, 2016 Report Share Posted October 12, 2016 Really interesting chapter! Loved it! Ray doesn't sound like he's much of a gangster or a hitman really. He doesn't really want to go through with this at all! Feel a bit sorry for him actually, especially because camping really doesn't sound like it's his cup of tea and he's gonna be stuck there for the foreseeable! So the guy who killed Kyle's mum is coming after him because he wants to tie up loose ends and make sure that Kyle can't identify him? Doesn't sound too good for Kyle! Looking forward to the next chapter x Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Ranger 1 Posted October 12, 2016 Report Share Posted October 12, 2016 Ah, okay, bit more information about why people are after Kyle.Looking forward to more! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted October 13, 2016 Report Share Posted October 13, 2016 Great chapter Ray doesn't sound like a hit man or gangster like Lubub said. Update again soon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted October 13, 2016 Author Report Share Posted October 13, 2016 Great chapter Interesting! Sounds like Ray is not a hitman neither a gangster Looking forwards to the next chapter xx Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ludub Posted October 13, 2016 Report Share Posted October 13, 2016 Cute plan to prank the boys. we'll see how it plays out. 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted October 13, 2016 Author Report Share Posted October 13, 2016 Great chapter Haha loved the girls' plan to prank the boys Update soon please xx 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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