valli Posted April 4, 2008 Report Share Posted April 4, 2008 (edited) Well, I think this is the first time I've ever read a fic from you I liked it, especially this part: Innocently, Belle shook her head. Irene must have eagle ears, she thought, to have heard both her and Aden. At that moment, Geoff came out of the bathroom, stinking horribly like aftershave. "I'd cut down on it next time." Belle coughed. It's so like typical that type of person that Belle is in this fic. Very fitting descriptions I think I'm going to like the whole Aden/Belle relationship. I love relationship that starts like friends And don't be so hard on yourself. This is quite good, better than anything I've ever written More please! Edited May 30, 2008 by Cerise Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cerise Posted April 4, 2008 Report Share Posted April 4, 2008 Thanks HM. See, I called you it, I was really tempted to call you by your full name because it's so pretty. Chapter Two... Teaser. Still laughing at Geoff's horrified expression when she had tactfully broken it to him that he smelled like someone she'd never want to see again, Belle walked up the pathway that lead up to the Jefferys' house. She was nervous because Aden's dad was home, and hoped it wouldn't be him who opened the door to her. Unfortunately, it was Larry Jefferys who answered, swinging the glass door open so that belle was surprised it didn't shatter. "What." he barked at her, spitting as he did. Belle took a smart step back. "Are you looking for Aden?" "Yeah, I am..." she began, when he himself came out the door and barged past his father. "Come on." he said and they set off towards Summer Bay High School. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ayeshax Posted April 4, 2008 Report Share Posted April 4, 2008 (edited) I really like it so far. Aden I like the summaries you had of all the characters and how there all the same age. The teaser for the second chapter is also intriguing as it gives us more insight into Aden's home life. Post soon. Edited April 4, 2008 by ayeshax Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BillyK Posted April 5, 2008 Report Share Posted April 5, 2008 Really good Keep up the good work Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Evil_gummy_shark Posted April 5, 2008 Report Share Posted April 5, 2008 excuse my why and jump up and down in joy because someone else is writing a fic with Aden and Belle, ok done. This was great and i can't wait to read more Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jen Posted April 6, 2008 Report Share Posted April 6, 2008 Great start. I can't wait to see where it all goes. It seems like things could get very complicated . Belle/Aden - I hadn't considered this combination before I started reading. I like it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cerise Posted April 6, 2008 Report Share Posted April 6, 2008 Well, I wrote a chapter and then I lost it. Sorry, guys. I'm sad. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
valli Posted April 6, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 6, 2008 Oh no, I really wanted to read it. Now I have to wait even longer Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cerise Posted April 6, 2008 Report Share Posted April 6, 2008 Yeah Bim, bam, bom.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
valli Posted April 6, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 6, 2008 Yeah, it's bim bam bom without the behind Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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