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  1. Eli

    ...appearently my message was too long...

    ...people I'm friends with here does.

    Forthly: Good night.

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    Firstly: Finally a photo! And it's weird you switched to a Lucas-av as I have always pictured you looking like Luke because the first av I remember you having was of him.

    Secondly: I will check out the ESC entry tomorrow. I bet it's not worse that our.

    Thirdly: I will read your fic soon, just the other day I was wondering if you had any fics as most other people I'm frien

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  3. I saw American Pie (the first one) yesterday I love that movie! "One time, in bandcamp..."
  4. I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed in a long time! I haven't checked the fan fiction forum very often, so I have missed all the updates. So here's a review of the last... erm... 7 chapters The graveyard would be enough to frighten Kane into keeping his mouth shut forever about the diamonds. This sentence to me describes Scotty as a person very well! Kirsty and Kane had returned from their night out to find a very tired two-year-old, lonely tears streaming down his face, jam on his nose and cornflakes in his hair, sitting in sugar and trying to “read” himself and his teddy bear a bedtime story from the back of an upside-down cornflakes packet. Aww, that is so cute! You gotta love Jamie! Were their lives really so empty that it took something like this to make them realise how bitter they’d become? As I have said before I really like the way you capture Shelley and Rhys's characters, and their feelings for Kane. “It’s a friendship bracelet,” she explained, pulling at the strands of pink wool. “Kirsty made us one each in our favourite colours when we were about ten. Pink for me, green for Kirst, and rainbow for Dani because she liked heaps of colours. Bigger than we needed then so we could keep them forever. We said whenever we missed each other, we’d wear them, and, well...I...I kept mine and still wear it when I miss Kirsty and Dani. Stupid, I know.” ...and the Sutherland sisters... I love the way you talk about their relationship. “And Kane.. He’s part of the family too." As above about Rhys and Shelley. Amazing chapter, of the last seven chapters this is in my opinion the most well written one! The night was waiting. As death does. A very powerful sentence! (actually two sentences, but you know what I mean..) “Kirst,” she whispered tearfully. “I...I saw the ghost of your little girl. I saw Lily.” So well written, and such an amazing twist of the story. Also a very good psychological twist of Dani's character. Maybe, Melanie thought bitterly, it was all that guys ever did. I feel so sorry for Melanie! And kudos for adding that part to the text, even though it isn't important for the storyline right there and then it just gives the paragraph the little extra. Very good! But sometimes a fraction of a second is the difference between life and death. Another very powerful sentence. This and the next two ones I have highlighted gave me the chills, so well written! And Ron’s death meant nothing at all to the sea, so the sea swirled for a few brief seconds around the small pool of blood floating up to its surface, and then it moved on. Colleen’s life had been, generally, a happy one and in her last few hours on earth she dreamed her life again. Weeks, months, even years flew by, condensed into seconds. I also loved the way you described Colleen's life. As usual this is very well written, and as usual I'm running out of superlatives to use when I review the chapters. Great updates, dying to read more!
  5. Thanks! I was thinking about the italics when I was writing, but I decided not to. Not sure why, really...
  6. I have two Kelli avs in my thread, but they're not black and white. it's pretty new, so you can find it on one of the last pages. Credit and don't hotlink if you use.
  7. Eli

    You're lucky to even have art as a subject in school! I don't have it this year, and I hate not having it. Not because I liked it that much, but it was my best subject :P

    It's not really that cold here either ATM, but it was very cold last week!

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    Oh, just the same old stuff, crappy ESC songs, snow, boredom... How is the green isle (that's where you live, right?!)?

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  9. That was four great chapters! I could go on reviewing forever! And so it would all end here in Summer Bay. Where all the pain first began. She knew they would blame Kane Phillips. I loved that part! This fic is really good, and I'm getting more and more excited about finding out where this goes!
  10. No problem, glad you like them Have you seen the movie to prepare for exams this summer? I remember we saw it to prepare for English oral exams last year
  11. I'll give it a try now It's a great movie!
  12. Thanks for that review and all the nice words I agree with you that Cindy is more realistic than Ric, and she is very important in this fic as she is very important in Dalby's life. So there will be more about her, that's all I can tell you I'm trying to update soon, but I'm pretty busy at the moment so I'm just popping in and out of the board at the moment.
  13. Here's a few from me
  14. I know how much constructive critisism can help, and that makes me feel really bad about the way I review your chapters, because I hardly ever find anything I would have changed! This is another two great chapters (I missed an update) with a lot of good writing. “A rabbit...?” Kane suggested hopefully. I loved that sentence! Made me smile Kane froze. Sometimes Scotty looked and sounded and acted so much like Dad it was almost like seeing his father in miniature. It hadn’t always been that way. When they were younger, his older brother would look out for him, warning him if it wasn’t safe to go home because the olds were bluing again, getting him out of the way if Dad was smashing up the furniture, saving him a share if they’d been out nicking lollies from Nosey Parker’s store. Kane didn’t know how or when or why things changed, only that they had That part was really good, it was so beautifully written. I lov the way you talk about Scotty and Kane's relationship. Kane looked up to blink them back. Between drifting clouds, one by one, the stars were slowly beginning to twinkle and sparkle in a fast darkening sky. He wondered if the little girl with the magic smile was watching the stars too. If she even remembered him. Aww, that is just so sweet! Really well written, and amazing how you managed to come back to Kirsty even when she wasn't an important part of the scene. Can't wait to read more
  15. No problem, and hey, I saved you a lot of time as you didn't have to change the crediting in your signature I'll go to bed now, the humour is getting poor...
  16. I AGREE!! When I cap I post the ones I think it will be okay for others to use, but it has happened several times that I have capped a pic I wanted to make sure I was the first one to make an av of, so I didn't post it. What is the point of posting them if people can't use them? I mean, sure it takes time to cap, but it's different from making stuff. Actually it's possible to make a cap yourself, I have experienced capping and then realising other people have made caps EXACTLY like mine before. I'd say you have to expect people using your caps (without crediting which I'm btw also okay woth) if you post them.
  17. No problem And BTW, I think I forgot to thank a few of the people making stuff for that request, sorry about that! But thanks for all the stuff, it's great!
  18. Thanks Lol, that is not how I picture Cindy
  19. It sucks but here's my first attempt...
  20. That was so amazingly well written!! You made me cry, it's so sad and so beautiful!
  21. Thanks I'm really glad you don't all hate Cindy, I was afraid you would
  22. Thank you I was so scared the last chapter would turn out as a total cliché
  23. Eli

    And hi to you too :P

    I love all these new features!!

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  24. An eerie wailing noise rose suddenly, high into the night, loud and unceasing, carried out to the darkening sea. And as night shrouded that lonely house of secrets even the hardened Scotty Phillips shivered in fear. I really liked that part, because you talked about the situation and described it from a totally different point of view than most authors do, and it gave an even better effect than if you had described what actually happened. Instead you pointed out that even Scotty was scared, meaning it had to be something really horrible. Jamie knew what must have upset Mum. Her family were always telling him to say pleases and thank yous and to ask politely before he did stuff. He wondered why Mum should bother about manners at a time like this, but grown-ups thought in strange ways and he was genuinely anxious to uphold the social niceties. “You don’t mind me swearin’, do ya?” He asked Scott. That part was really good! The way Jamie manages to break up the tense situation like that. It made it totally realistic, and I could picture the situation. Great chapter, can't wait to see where this goes!
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