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Zetti

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I agree with Zetti, I wasn't sure what sort of story this would be, but the way you wrote it was beautifully done. I agree when you say there should have been scene like this somewhere in the mix. You managed to show both Jai and Melody's perspectives of the situation (which I guess was the aim) but you managed to avoid one coming out looking more "superior" or "better" than the other. I liked the simple ending too. It was a bit of surprise when Axel's mother didn't recognise Melody, but I think it was a good realisation for Mel to have. Well done.

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Gosh, these one-shots get moved quickly, don't they?I was going to leave it on the main site until Friday.

Anyway, thank you to everyone who's read and/or commented on it.I was trying really hard to give equal balance to their different perspectives and I'm glad you thought I managed it.

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