Guevara01 Posted December 15, 2005 Report Share Posted December 15, 2005 (edited) That was great, you're a really good writer! Well done. xxx Edited January 23, 2016 by QUIET ACHIEVER Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WYN100 Posted December 16, 2005 Report Share Posted December 16, 2005 WOW -Angel this is awesome !! IT's SO sensitively written and of course has huge potential- don't worry about the time-frames either - I always did that when I first started writing fics on here , but I remembered, that's the whole point of this section - you really CAN throw in characters from yesterday to 10 years ago and have them in stories 2gether I really will look 4ward to more when u get the chance Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I love music Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 It's pretty good but could you space out the sentences a bit more? Leave a line space after anyone talks, I mean. It's a bit difficult to read when it's jumbled together and I'd like to read on. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMar Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 I like what you have written so far, but as Ilovemusic says, some paragraphs would be nice. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WYN100 Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 HEY - what another top chapter ! It's SO well written - and interesting too ! 1) to see if all the Bay are willing to help or if anyone has any surprising prejudices emerging, and 2) I truly hadn't heard of that Amish tradition before ! Anyways - look forward 2 next chapter whenever you have time ! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMar Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 HEY - what another top chapter ! It's SO well written - and interesting too ! 1) to see if all the Bay are willing to help or if anyone has any surprising prejudices emerging, and 2) I truly hadn't heard of that Amish tradition before ! Anyways - look forward 2 next chapter whenever you have time ! <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Hello Not to be too hard, but please don't use 'text language', but proper spelling, punctuation and grammar. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guevara01 Posted December 19, 2005 Author Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 HEY - what another top chapter ! It's SO well written - and interesting too ! 1) to see if all the Bay are willing to help or if anyone has any surprising prejudices emerging, and 2) I truly hadn't heard of that Amish tradition before ! Anyways - look forward 2 next chapter whenever you have time ! <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Hello Not to be too hard, but please don't use 'text language', but proper spelling, punctuation and grammar. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> The only thing wrong was "2" not to, everything else was fine???? xx Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AngelRose Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 I'm not complaining honestly, but I wasn't taught to deal with paragraphs that way; I will happily do as requested but please remind me if I forget! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMar Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 Yes, but if you don't "catch" it right away, it gets out of hand. And it's one of the rules of the board. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MarMar Posted December 19, 2005 Report Share Posted December 19, 2005 I'm not complaining honestly, but I wasn't taught to deal with paragraphs that way; I will happily do as requested but please remind me if I forget! <{POST_SNAPBACK}> I don't find it difficult to read the speach, but after so-and-so many lines, a new paragraph would be good, because reading a long text in just one paragraph is hard. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Join the conversation
You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.