Last Final Goodbye To Beth Hunter (by Willz) - comments

[emmasi]

lol.... that was so random...

Um, good to see that you're having a go, but you seriously need to improve your writing. I mean that generally, as in spelling and grammar. It can be very difficult to understand what you're on about sometimes.

Anyway, that was fun

[Eden]

I agree with what Emmasi said. It is good that you are trying, but have a bit more of a try with grammar, spelling. It is hard to understand what you were on about. (As emmasi said).

[~Rosey~]

but you seriously need to improve your writing. I mean that generally, as in spelling and grammar.

I agree

Maybe you should get a proof reader.

But still, I liked the fic

[SfanS]

Awww, so sad....do you want kme to be your Proofer!?

[Traceve]

Robbie: Me and mum had the best and wicked time together and she is a hot mum and never I though the day when I helping mum making Chocolate cake and I tip it upside down on my head and I will never forget you mum and I love you

That was great Wilz. But, I dont think Robbie would refrer to his dead mother as hot mum

[SfanS]

Oh, one more thing....was that a oneshot, or are you continuing...?

[~Rosey~]

Robbie: Me and mum had the best and wicked time together and she is a hot mum and never I though the day when I helping mum making Chocolate cake and I tip it upside down on my head and I will never forget you mum and I love you

That was great Wilz. But, I dont think Robbie would refrer to his dead mother as hot mum

I agree

[emmasi]

Heh, really? I wouldn't put it past Robbie to say that at all

[~Lynd~]

^^You beat me to it.I wouldn't put it past him,he's a cheecky bugger!

[>>Emma<<]

Good try, I agree with emmasi and eden, but good effort,