I'll Always Be Here (by Danni02) - comments

[twinkletoesjess]

Chapter 42

I really loved this chapter. I love the scene with Angelo,Charlie and Shelly. I loved Charlies reactions to everything that Shelly was saying and Im glad that Angelo stopped Charlie from slapping Shelly even though she deserves it, least Ruby managed to get the slap in last time. I feel really sorry for Charlie at the moment, everything was finally looking up for them and then Shelly returns and with bad news. Everything just seems to be going wrong but I dont blame Charlie for throwing Angelo out. I loved that Ava and Ben were worried about Charlie and that Ava thought to phone Ruby to get her to help. That was so cute Ava and Ben working together to get the phone. I really loved the end with Ruby and Charlie.

Chapter 43

I really loved this chapter.I loved everything that Ruby said to Charlie. I love that Ruby knows Charlie well enough to be able to talk to her like that and know how to get her to open up about what she is feeling and thinking. I loved the bit with Charlie putting High School Musical on as a way to try and get Ava to talk to her again. Ava was so cute when she asked to rewind it back. Ooh Morag didnt react too nicely to the news. Not that Im surprised about that but Charlie really doesnt need Morag yelling at her and telling her she is stupid.

Chapter 44

I loved this chapter. Poor Ava being teased by everyone about a boyfriend that she doesnt have. I loved her telling Angelo that he told her she had to wait till she was 21. I loved that Angelo was trying to make an effort with Charlie even though she is not ready to talk yet. Ruby's surfing lesson was really good. I loved the way you wrote that. Seems Ruby might be a natural at it. I like that Jay is taking an interest in Ruby's family life and that Ruby was able to confide in him about what was happening at home. Im really intruiged about the text message, who's it from and what its about. Aww they kissed and Ruby was happy about it. I really like this pairing.

Cant wait till your next update

[callyha]

Loved that whole update Danni!

I at Ava when she was teased by Charlie and Ruby, and then by Angelo. It was really sweet!

And how Ava said to Angelo "You told me 21" I LOVED that little bit, it made me chuckle

The surf lesson was a great touch, and Ruby feels at ease with Jay, but that message

And Charlie and Angelo are going to talk more about the situation with uber bitch -I mean Shelly-

More soon please Danni! xx

[Laura158]

Great Update

I loved the conversation between Ava, Ruby, Charlie and Angelo at the beginning about Ava's boyfriends! It was sweet to see them interacting with each other in a cheeky way!

Not too sure about Jay anymore.. somethings wrong- with the text messages and all.

I might of missed something but does he work in a surf shop or something?

Fantastic work! Can't wait for more

[callyha]

I really LOVED this chapter Danni.

Morag is so protective over Charlie, its sweet

And when the baby moved I loved that whole little bit, especially:

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“Charlie, I will, I swear I will never ever do anything to hurt you again” Angelo said as he placed his hand on Charlie’s shoulder. They smiled lovingly at each other and stared deep into each other’s eyes. His smile grew larger before he leaned in to kiss her but Charlie quickly pulled back and put her hand onto her stomach as she let out a little gasp. “Charlie, what is it? Are you okay?” Angelo asked sounding concerned.

“Yeah, I felt the baby move” Charlie smiled

“What? You can feel Peanut move already?” Angelo asked.

“Yeah, well it was more like a little flutter” Charlie answered “I guess I’m just more aware of it because of the amount of times you’ve knocked me up” Charlie laughed.

That made me chuckle and go all warm and fuzzy

But Shelly GRRR I want to PUNCH HER LIGHTS OUT!!!!

And Colleens reaction, hopefully she will keep this to herself, but saying that, it is Colleen.....

MOre soon please Danni, I LOVE you fic xx:)

[mellbell86]

Oh how I do love Colleen. Doesn't she just make you wanna hug her? I just love the way you write her. I sure hope she can keep this secret but golly gosh, she finds something out and off she goes running. Has me in stitches. Love it.

Ahh Shelley, can we just get rid of her. I mean sure what's a story without drama but she just makes me wanna grit my teeth And Morag, she's just all up in the bad moods. What's going on with her in that city? I hope she doesn't hand out too many more lectures although Angelo is right, she's just wanting the best for Charlie and stuff but still someone give them a break already. Poor people!

How sweet, the baby kicking Loved their conversation. It was a mix of emotions, serious talk yet light humour. Such a great mix and then the little trip to the Diner. Hope to see them working together more in the future.

Great writing, Danni. Can't wait to read more x

[Laura158]

Great Update

Thanks for the heads up about Jay! I should read it more carefully next time!

Loved that update- I'm soo glad Angelo and Charlie are back together

Colleen is soo sweet I wonder how long it will be before she lets the secret slip!

I'm happy Charlie told Shelly! I don't think Shelly with be in a hurry to see her again

Fantastic Work ! I'm addicted!

[charlie29]

great update, love that Charlie is going to work things out with Angelo, but not loving Shelly and the trouble she is causing! Hope Colleen keeps her word and doesn't let anything slip! The part with peanut moving was so sweet. Update soon!

[Barbara]

That's exactly the way Morag would react on the show. She can be really protective of the people she loves.

The talk between Angelo and Charlie was good. They still want to work on their marriage. I loved the part where the baby moved.

Oh no Colleen heard about Shelley's pregnancy! I wonder how long she'll manage to keep it a secret.

Shelley! I wish she would just go far away and annoy somebody else.

Great chapter Danni!

More please.

[callyha]

Great little update Danni! Loved it!

Ava made me chuckle when she called Shelly stupid! And I loved how Charlie had to bite her lip, that amused me!

How cute are Ben and Ava? They're so adorable!

Grr, Shelly, I HATE her and I can't believe she tried to tell Ava! She a bitch!

Oh no! what's wrong with Morag? Hope its nothing bad

More soon please Danni, I LOVE it!!

[carywary]

Whoops I've missed two updates while I've been away...

Chapter 45 - BRILLIANT!! Loved this one. I like how Morag cares so much about Charlie, but I wish she'd give Angelo a chance, it's not good for Charlie to be stressed! Poor Angelo, I feel sorry for him in this scene, no wonder he didn't speak! I really liked their wee chat and the friendly banter too. I love how he is so interested in the baby, and their little moment and the flutter I love how he told Charlie about meeting Shelly before Shelly got to her cos it avoided another whole fight. Ugh Shelly, is she ever going to give up? And now Colleen knows...well...I wouldn't count on it being kept a secret, but I wish she would!

Chapter 46 - Shelly!! I can't believe she was going to tell Ava! I'm glad Charlie stopped that. Ava calling Shelly stupid made me laugh It's a pity Angelo was working, but then again if he was there things might have gotten out of control, so maybe it's best he wasn't. I loved seeing the little morning routine with Charlie and the kids, I see she's still on the peanut butter . I hope Morag's ok, Rachel closely behind her?

Great updates Danni!