I'll Always Be Here (by Danni02) - comments

[carywary]

Wow, brilliant updates Danni!

Chapter 30 - You wrote the diner scene really well, I loved how Angelo was just sitting there having breakfast and the next minute he was running out of the diner to go to the abortion clinic. I liked the way you wrote about what Angelo was thinking on the way to the clinic, as I was reading this I was thinking please don't have an abortion cos you couldn't really blame Angelo if he didn't forgive her for killing his baby just because she had only been keeping it for him. I liked the way we got to see part of his reaction before Charlie told him she had kept the baby. I'm glad they had the wee chat, I wish Charlie would go away with him and sort things out, maybe if they went away for their anniversary it would make them remember their wedding and all that they've been through since then. Yayy he's going to the scan! I'm glad that even though she says she hates him she isn't shutting him out of their baby's life. You wrote it perfectly.

Chapter 31 - I love the way Angelo brought the kids to see the houses before he made a decision, hopefully they'll be spending a lot of time there with him. I loved their little father/daughter scene, Angelo ruffling her hair and getting told off for it, and Ava being happy that he knew her favourite colour and high school musical doll. It must have been so hard for Angelo to try and explain things to the kids without upsetting them too much. I hope his promise comes true! He sort of dug himself a hole there! I loved Charlie and Ruby's chat about Jay and Angelo, they both gave good advice. And poor Irene, she came at the wrong time! Oh I hope Charlie's ok

Chapter 32 - "Morag smiled" she is so calm! I wish Charlie had been a little happier to see Angelo, she wanted him gone from the moment he arrived. I'm glad Ruby left them alone to have a wee chat, I thought it was lovely when Angelo said that he thinks of Ruby as his own daughter and would love it if she came to stay with them. Silly Rachel, bad timing! Although she may have stopped an argument! I love how Rachel was able to share her experiences with Charlie and made Charlie realise just how much Angelo loved her and all that he had done for her I loved the way you wrote that bit, the emotions were perfect. I really hope Charlie talks to Angelo about everything.

Chapter 33 - Poor Ava, she's so affected by all of this I thought Martha handled it really well. Angelo shouldn't have spoiled the kids, but he kind of redeemed himself by getting the tea, I thought we were going to see another argument! But at the same time they're his kids too so he should be able to spoil them if he wants to! And just as things are looking like they might sort some things out...the promise comes back on him...whoops! Poor Angelo, you'd think he wasn't their dad, Charlie doesn't seem to like his parenting techniques.

Chapter 34 - I loved Ava's little plan so cute and it got Charlie and Angelo in the same room, that made me laugh! Silly Angelo got taken in by her plan, but I'm sure he wasn't complaining! I'm sure Charlie enjoyed sleeping in Angelo's bed and he was lovely, sleeping on the couch. I really really loved the wee scene with them in the kitchen, and the way the two of them worked together to get Ben ready for bed again. It was lovely when Charlie said that she'd go away with Angelo after all, Ava's plan worked in a way! And I'm feeling hopefull for their marriage too!

Keep up the great work!

[charlie29]

I loved it! Ava was very cute pretending to be ill and poor ben wetting the bed. There is some progress in Charlie and angelo's relationship now, hopefully they will work things out soon. Loved the peanut butter craving lol! More soon please

[Sabrina]

Brilliant updates, Danni!

Chapter 32 - I'm so glad that Charlie and the baby are ok. I liked the talk Rachel had with Charlie.

Chapter 33 - Poor Ava. I'm glad she was able to talk to Martha about everything. Loved the hug between Ava and Martha. Angelo was really sweet getting Charlie the ginger tea.

Chapter 34 - I loved Ava's plan for getting Charlie and Angelo to talk. I'm glad Charlie decided to go away with Angelo, hopefully things will start working out between them.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

[twinkletoesjess]

Awww, I really loved this chapter. I really liked that Martha and Charlie talked. Everything Martha said was perfect, and I liked that it came from Martha even more. Im glad that she told Charlie about about Ava being upset and I liked that Charlie thought that the children blamed her and that Martha was able to prove that Ava didnt think that.

I really liked the Jay/Ruby date.I liked that they were telling each other about their lives and how they came to the bay. Poor Ruby getting upset over Xavier and his killer not being found.

Looking forward to you next update

[callyha]

Amazing update Danni! Loved it

Charlie and Martha have such a good friendship, I'm glad Martha is there for Charlie in her hour of need

And I laughed when I read

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“Hey Callum” Martha grinned as she gently rubbed his cheek. Callum let out a little babble of excitement as he waved his arms out. “Gosh he looks so much like Xavier” Martha said as she stood herself back up.

“I know, poor kid” Charlie said

“Charlie” Martha gasped before the pair let out a small laugh. “How is Ruby, anyways?” Martha asked

How sweet is Jay for comforting Ruby? I loved it.

And I think Ruby is liking him, otherwise she wouldn't have told him (nearly) the reason why Charlie was so young when she had Ruby.

Can't wait for the next update Danni, I really LOVE this!

[Inactive User]

Great chapter

Loved the talk between Martha and Charlie

Liked the conversation between Jay and Ruby

Update soon please x

[carywary]

Great update, I thought the bit at the start with Callum was cute, and funny! I think it's great that Angelo and Jack are still trying to find out who ran Xavier over, Angelo loves Ruby like she's his own daughter, it's lovely that he won't give up looking. I'm glad they had that chat, and Martha has reassured Charlie about everything and at least Charlie knows she can confide in Martha. I like how Jay's being sensitive with Ruby, and respecting that she doesn't want to rush things, but at the same time the company could be good for her. Poor Charlie, I really hope she talks things through with Angelo and they work something out to say to the kids. Update soon!

[twinkletoesjess]

Aww I really liked this chapter. I really do like the relationship that you have created between Ruby and Charlie. I like that they talk to each other about everything and that they are always giving each other advice. I like that Ruby is often the voice of reason and often makes charlie see things from a different angle. Aww Ruby likes Jay but isnt ready for a relationship yet.

I like that Charlie and Angelo have talked through some things and are looking to move past everything. I really liked what they said to each other during the conversation. Im glad Charlie is able to forgive him and I really hope he is able to gain her trust again. They still have a lot to work through but they have definatly made the first step.

Looking forward to you next update

[Chester-Sam]

Aww Ruby's little hug was cute

I hope Rubes can start to move on soon :/

I still think Angelo is a sleaze bag

- Sam!

[callyha]

Aww, I love how you are portraying Charlie and Ruby's relationship. Its so perfect! And I loved their little hug at the beginning How cute

I really hope Ruby does move forward, Jay seems really nice.

And I am so glad Charlie was able to bring herself to forgive Angelo for what he did. (He still is a twat for sleeping with her), but I really hope Angelo regains Charlie's trust before the baby is born, and I loved

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“We still continue to live separately for now” Charlie said “But we will be working on our marriage and one day, me and the kids will move into your place” Charlie said and Angelo nodded as a smile appeared on his face.

More soon Danni, I absolutely LOVE this fic!

Cally xx

Edited August 7, 2010 by callyha