Bretto Posted January 8, 2016 Report Share Posted January 8, 2016 Great chapter 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jackpittorino Posted January 8, 2016 Author Report Share Posted January 8, 2016 3 hours ago, Romeo&Indi Forever said: Great chapter I look forward to where you take this. update soon Thank you for your complement and I will update as I can Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jackpittorino Posted January 10, 2016 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 Chapter 1 Part 1 1988 Ten years later Pippa had just finished putting the icing on the cake for her husband Tom's 40th Birthday then Frank walk into the kitchen Frank Hows it going Pippa Fine (Pippa then picks up and then shows Frank a small inch icing figure that resembles him) think he looks like you Frank No not hansome enough (Frank giggles) See ya Pippa Bye (Pippa then puts the small inch icing figures on Tom's Birthday Cake) Frank, Carly, Lynn, Sally and Steven (Pippa then says to herself more like five is Sufficient Mr. Jarvis Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bobby Forever Missed Posted January 10, 2016 Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 Great update but may i suggest making your chapters longer? that way we as readers can get lost in the story 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Suzza101 Posted January 10, 2016 Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 Great update 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jackpittorino Posted January 10, 2016 Author Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 8 minutes ago, Bobby Forever Missed said: Great update but may i suggest making your chapters longer? that way we as readers can get lost in the story I assure you and promised that future chapters will be longer 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Posted January 10, 2016 Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 Great update I look forward to the next chapter Update again soon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bretto Posted January 10, 2016 Report Share Posted January 10, 2016 Great chapter 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted January 11, 2016 Report Share Posted January 11, 2016 Great chapter Liked it Looking forwars to the next chapter xx 1 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jackpittorino Posted January 21, 2016 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2016 Chapter 1 Part 2 6:30 pm Pippa and the kids just finished singing happy birthday to Tom and Tom felt very happy Tom Now Turning 40 for some men is like a threat end of there youth and all that sort of thing . But for me Looking round me it's just the start (Tom feeling very happy) I have a terrific wife the best and I'm serious mate ( Pippa gives Tom a kiss on the cheek) I have Five top kids . Frank, Carly, Lynn, Steven and Sally. But what could I say Sally What about Milco (Note: Milco is Sally's imaginary Friend) Tom Ohh sorry how could I forgot him. Milco too sorry mate. We've had our ups and downs getting to know each other hadn't we. We'il probably have some more too. But I think I'm a pretty lucky bloke. Since I just turned 40 all I like to say is I'm looking forward for the next 40 I'm looking forward to seeing you all grow up and maybe have kids of your own and have your own 40th birthdays . See there's nothing to worry about here with getting on and not with much love as I have and I love you all the same way. We better cut that cake hey Sally I want the biggest pice the next day Tom just arrived at the office and then sits at his disk and starts up his Macintosh Plus computer then his boss Ben approach him Ben Can I see you in my office please Tom Tom Whatever it is I'm innocent (Tom thought his boss Ben was joking around. by the look of Ben's face he wasn't) Tom Why do I need to see you in your office what's it about Ben It's not good. Come in to the office End of Chapter 1 part 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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