soph1303 Posted November 17, 2011 Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 WOW great two updates!! 1st update: EPIC update, Loved reading everyone's perspective on the situation!! I felt so sorry for Brax and Ruby especially in that update:(!! It was nice to see that Heath kinda accepts now that Charlie is good for Brax. I agree - I hope that whole beach thing was a prophecy of the future!! In a petty way, I'm glad that Bianca feels so bad about it now that she realises that if Charlie dies it will be partly her fault! I know that sounds really bad, but that's how I feel! Hope Charlie's ok!!! Second update: Wow!! Was not at all expecting that!! Aww they were gonna have a baby and be so happy together!! And then Jake had to go ruin all that !! Very bittersweet update:(!! Hopefully all this means that Charlie's still gonna wake up and be ok though!! More soon please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Freakie42 Posted November 17, 2011 Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 Loving the new chapter, hope you update soon, can't wait! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ldscott Posted November 17, 2011 Report Share Posted November 17, 2011 Charlie don't die!!!! Loved this up dat and can't wait to find out if she survives! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
faith406 Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 Hi, glad your all enjoying it so far. Thanks again for the comments. Hope you enjoy this next Chapter :-) Chapter 6 The Hospital “Casey what’s happened.” Heath could see as he re-entered the hospital that things had gotten a whole lot worse. As Casey turned to look at his brother while holding onto Ruby he uttered the words Heath hoped that wouldn’t be said “she’s stopped breathing.” The Beach Charlie’s parents watched her as she played with her little boy knowing that even though they loved they’re little girl she needed to fight. She had so much more to live, she deserved to be happy. “Lottie.” “Mum I hate that, please don’t call me that. I’m not a little girl no more.” Charlie said in reply to the name her mum would call her as a little girl. “You’ll always be my little girl. You know you can’t stay here, you need to start fighting before it’s too late.” “What if I’m tired of fighting, what if I want to stay here with my little boy.” “I get that you don’t want to have to leave him but I know you’re going to be a mother again. You’re going to enjoy your pregnancy and the sleepless nights as he or she wakes up every hour on the hour. But you need to go back for all that to happen.” “Why?” “Why, what sweetie?” “Why did this happen, I really wanted him. If I go back I don’t have him no more.” Getting angry Charlie got up “Why am I always having to fight, I’m tired of fighting.” As Charlie took off on the beach to calm herself she felt a presence behind her. “Just go away please, mom I just want to be on my own for a second.” As Charlie turn to tell her mum to leave her be she spun around to see a friendly face from the past. “Jack” Charlie exhaled as he slowly moved forward and embraced her. The Hospital In the room all that could heard was the deafening beep of Charlies monitors, reminding all in the room that she was in deed dead. As the doctors and nurses worked on reviving Charlie, Heath, Brax, Casey and Ruby looked on in distress at the turn of situation. The continuous line on the screen indicating that the worst had happened was taunting Brax as he looked on helplessly while he and Casey held Ruby on either side. Just then Bianca and Liam came running into the emergency room, as Bianca turned a corner in a rush to find her best friend, the scene that greeted her made her stop in her tracks. “No no no, Charlie” Bianca screamed as she saw what was happening. “Get them out of here” Sid called to one of the nurses “Please can I ask you to leave” a nurse went over to try to escort them out of the room. As Bianca, Liam, Heath and Casey left the room an adamant Brax and Ruby refused to leave Charlie alone. “Please you need to leave” the nurse pleaded with them to go. She could see how much they loved Charlie but seeing this was just causing them more pain. “Leave them be Kate, I need you over here please.” Sid called over. Another doctor came rushing into the room, everything became a blur of noise as people were rushing around speaking in medical jargon that neither Brax nor Ruby understood. What they did know was that the most important person in both their lives was lying dead on a hospital bed. As Sid shocked her again nothing happened, they watched on as they continued compressions on her heart to bring her back to them. The Beach Charlie Sitting on the beach with Jack feels so weird but strangely a bit comforting. I can see him mulling over wanting to say something to me. Remembering our first few encounters when I first came to the bay, back then Jack didn’t hold back on telling me how exactly I should do my job. Looking at him I realise just how much I missed my old partner. “Jack spit it out already. As I can remember you used to give it to me guns blazing when you had an opinion.” Getting annoyed and frustrated from watching the wheels turn in his head, I am more than ready to hear what he has to say. “Yeah but the difference is before I had time to have you be pissed about what I said then be able to think it over later on. Time isn’t really on my side now.” “Yeah well, when is time ever on our sides. Jack just spit it out already.” “Why are you here Charlie?” “What, you not glad to see your old partner” I reply with just a tad bit of sarcasm. “It’s good to see you but you don’t have to be here. Why’d you stop fighting? ” “I could ask you the same question Jack.” “I didn’t have a choice, Angelo’s a pretty good shot.” “That’s not funny Jack.” I glare at him making jest out of it. “I know, I’m sorry but it’s the truth and I didn’t have a choice to fight or not. If I did I would have fought with all my might to stay with Martha. ” “I don’t doubt that for a second. It hit her really hard, actually it hit us all hard when you died but her the most and you’re Dad.” “So why don’t you spare your family and friends that same pain and fight to be with them.” “Maybe I’m just weak. I finally thought that everything was going well in my life. That me, Brax and Ruby were all going to be happy in the city and then this happened. Maybe I’m just cursed, cause it seems like nothing right is supposed to happen for me.” I start to tear up at all the emotions welling up inside me, this year’s hurts and dramas finally weighing in on me. Suddenly I felt Jacks hand on my face to lift my head up and look at him. “You know what I see when I look at you. A feisty strong woman whose overcome a lot to get to where she is now. What makes you even stronger is that you’ll admit when you’re wrong even if it takes a bit of time for you to see clearly. You’ve grown and changed from the Charlie I first met who wouldn’t listen to a word of advice her partner would give her. I still can’t believe you tackled that psyche patient on the beach, even after my words of advice. ” “Please don’t remind me” I say remembering the incident. I was adamant in doing things my way I wouldn’t even listen to a shred of advice Jack would give me when I first came to the bay. “Jack if only you knew the half of it, the things I’ve done. I completely compromised myself as a cop and broke the oath I took. You wouldn’t be saying those things if you knew.” “Oh trust me I know what’s been going on. I’ve played around with evidence before so who am I to judge, love makes you do some crazy things.” “You what?” I look to Jack a bit shocked and perplexed by his nonchalant revelation. “Long story short, Martha’s ex-boyfriend Cam, I attempted to frame him for drug dealing but Cam got wind of the plan and planted them instead on Martha who was arrested, I ended up having to remove the evidence to get her off.” “Oh wow, but you’re so straight laced” “Yeah well, it’s was for Martha. I’d do anything for her. We’ve all been guilty of letting out personal lives have an effect on our jobs. Look at Angelo letting Hugo get free. You’re a good person Charlie, the road can’t always be smooth. ” I suddenly scream out in pain and double over as a sharp shooting pain sears though my body. “Jack, what’s happening?” “Charlie please times running out, you need to decide to go back or not because soon you’re not going to have a choice.” “I can’t” “Why not?” As my eyes scan over to my parents with my little boy I tell Jack the main reason I don’t want to go back. The little baby that earlier that day made me happy at the thought that I was pregnant with mine and Braxs baby. That I was going to be able to be a mum to my child from the moment they were born. “I don’t want to go back if I don’t have my little boy” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danni02 Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 Great update. I liked Charlie and Jack's talk. Aww while I completely understand that Charlie doesnt want to lose her son, as her mother said, she could go back and have that. I hope she goes back, Ruby and Brax would be devestated. Update soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sazzle Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 Great wriiting! Hope that Charlie starts fighting! "Come on woman" - Really want her to think of Brax and Ruby! Know its proper harsh about her little boy but hoping she starts fighting soon. Its a really nice touch to have Jack there. Love that Brax and Ruby haven't left her side! Really hoping that she can make the fight back to them. Looking forward to your next update Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 I agree with Sazzie. You write really well Great stuff! Update soon xx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
marie_the_bee Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 Charlie better stay fighting!! She has to wake up she might be leaving her little boy but shes going back to her Daughter and the love of her life!! LOved Jack coming to talk to her!! Update soon please x Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GeorgieNZ Posted November 19, 2011 Report Share Posted November 19, 2011 Aww Jack and Charlie's talk was sooo cute but really want to to survive!! Bianca go away please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JosieTash Posted November 20, 2011 Report Share Posted November 20, 2011 That was waaaaaaaaay emotional, especially ,,,,,, “Lottie.” “Mum I hate that, please don’t call me that. I’m not a little girl no more.” Charlie said in reply to the name her mum would call her as a little girl. “You’ll always be my little girl. You know you can’t stay here, you need to start fighting before it’s too late.” “Jack” Charlie exhaled as he slowly moved forward and embraced her. “You know what I see when I look at you. A feisty strong woman whose overcome a lot to get to where she is now. What makes you even stronger is that you’ll admit when you’re wrong even if it takes a bit of time for you to see clearly. You’ve grown and changed from the Charlie I first met who wouldn’t listen to a word of advice her partner would give her. I still can’t believe you tackled that psyche patient on the beach, even after my words of advice. ” “I don’t want to go back if I don’t have my little boy” Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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