Danni02 Posted November 2, 2011 Report Posted November 2, 2011 Oh My God I'm crying here. It's so sad! That was brillaintly written, Lucii. So sad that Charlie has to go into witness protection. Poor Brax and Ruby And she's pregnant....such a shame Brax will never get to know his baby! Oh gosh, no Quote
once_upon_a_mind Posted November 2, 2011 Report Posted November 2, 2011 OMG that was a really great one piece! I wish you'd continue but I guess leaving it like that is a great way of ending things. It juxtaposes with the fact that Charlie's life as Charlie is over. Awww seriously, written beautifully!! Quote
Inactive User Posted November 2, 2011 Report Posted November 2, 2011 OMG!! OMG!!! I am almost in tears when reading this! Such a sad and touching oneshot you had ever written! Well done! Quote
Shezza Posted November 3, 2011 Report Posted November 3, 2011 That was so sad. Fantastic writing. I almost wish this was the start of a story and you were going to continue with it too Quote
HighwayUnicorn Posted November 3, 2011 Report Posted November 3, 2011 (edited) Deleted. Edited November 20, 2012 by HighwayUnicorn Quote
callyha Posted November 5, 2011 Report Posted November 5, 2011 Loved this, I read it the other day on my lunch break and never got around to commenting. A crazy theory of yours turned into a fantastic one-shot! It was amazing and sad at the same time. I was -in truth- expecting a happy ending, but I like how you didn't have that and you kept it close to reality. Even though it is still sad Loved it, and if you have any more crazy theories.....share them lol Quote
JosieTash Posted November 5, 2011 Report Posted November 5, 2011 That was BEYOND BRILLIANT !!!!!! Soooooooooooooo moving and emotional, especially ....... Smiling weakly she made shaky steps towards the door. She hadn’t been eating properly and her weight began to plummet. Wearing black only made her look more gaunt and washed out. ”We’ll be there to provide for Ruby” Watson chipped in. ”I will personally make sure myself that she gets the best protection from the force” ”It’s not fair if you stay either come on Kate it’s time to go” ”Okay” Kate was grateful for the few extra days, her heart was already breaking at the thought of Ruby’s and Brax’s reactions. But she had to stay to get her head round the whole idea, so she could secretly say good bye to them one last time without them even knowing. Flowers were arranged to spell out her name as the empty coffin was lowered to the ground. A long way back in a small black car where the windows were dimmed, Kate Grundy watched her own funeral taking place. Tears rolled down her cheeks as she watched the ones she loved most grieve for someone they thought they had lost. She clutched her stomach cradling the baby that should have been a joyous celebration for their little family, instead she realised she’d raise it on her own. She watched Ruby and Brax for a few moments, her heart aching to run after them and show them she was okay but to keep them safe she knew she had to do this. Quote
soph1303 Posted November 5, 2011 Report Posted November 5, 2011 Oh my god!! That was amazing!!! And heartbreaking!! I actually nearly cried reading that!! It was more realistic that it didn't work out, but I couldn't help but wish as I read the end that this was the start of a longer story! Because it was so, so awesome!! Quote
elikell Posted November 9, 2011 Report Posted November 9, 2011 This was just so amazingly well written and just a purely amazing story all around. Very sad that Charlie had to leave, but sometimes life doesn't turn out the way we planned. Just amazing. I loved it so so much. Well done Quote
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