Red Ranger 1 Posted December 5, 2009 Report Posted December 5, 2009 Nice start.You did a good job of building up Charlotte's character while keeping me wondering if that was Geoff or Aden who was giving her goosebumps.Although given the intro, I suspect she may be on a hiding to nothing...Looking forward to finding out more about why Geoff's there. Quote
Georgia Posted December 6, 2009 Report Posted December 6, 2009 Great start. I really like Charlotte, and I want to see what will happen (if anything!) between her and Geoff... I have a feeling that nothing will (I read the intro) Can't wait for the next part Quote
Georgia Posted December 8, 2009 Report Posted December 8, 2009 I really loved this story. It was different to what I was expecting, and I loved how you incorporated your original character. Also, if you ever want to continue with this story, or write a prequel/sequel, you can, concentrating on how things actually ended in Summer Bay, because a couple of the lines towards the end made me wonder what actually happened in Summer Bay. Thank you for sharing this with us Quote
Scotcaz22 Posted December 8, 2009 Report Posted December 8, 2009 That was brilliant! Have to say I agree with Georgia about a potential pre-sequel to explain what happened back in Summer Bay to make Aden and Geoff leave. Or even a sequel with Charlotte - I want to know what happened to her and whether if Aden and Geoff got her a boyfriend! LOL! Brilliant, once again! I loved it. Quote
tessalove Posted December 8, 2009 Report Posted December 8, 2009 I really loved it! It was a great read! El x Quote
Red Ranger 1 Posted December 8, 2009 Author Report Posted December 8, 2009 Ha-hah!Yes, I had a feeling Geoff had a significant other.He and Aden seemed a bit eager given that they were in a car park...Glad that Charlotte didn't mind too much and accepted them as her gay best friends.Like others have said, seems to be quite a story behind them leaving the Bay... Quote
Jen Posted December 9, 2009 Report Posted December 9, 2009 Thank you so much for the feedback Georgia, Scotcaz22, tessalove and Red Ranger 1. I really appreciate them all. Also, if you ever want to continue with this story, or write a prequel/sequel, you can, concentrating on how things actually ended in Summer Bay, because a couple of the lines towards the end made me wonder what actually happened in Summer Bay. I tried to write that bit slightly ambiguously because I do have an idea for a sort of prequel about how things came out. That was brilliant! Have to say I agree with Georgia about a potential pre-sequel to explain what happened back in Summer Bay to make Aden and Geoff leave. Or even a sequel with Charlotte - I want to know what happened to her and whether if Aden and Geoff got her a boyfriend! LOL! Same as my reply to Georgia, ideas are in progress. The problem is I tend to get distracted when I write fics and I'm one of those people who won't post them until they are finished. So if that means some sit on my computer for over a year, then so it shall be! At the moment I have like 3 half-written fanfics of all kinds, plus about 5 ideas for one/two-shots, so I don't know what will get done. The feedback is all awesome though . Quote
Inactive User Posted December 9, 2009 Report Posted December 9, 2009 Great fic, mate Liked it. Great work. Gaden do make such a great couple, do they?? Lol! Quote
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