KaiyaBlake Posted May 24, 2009 Report Share Posted May 24, 2009 Carrie is a b*tch! I wonder what she's going to tell everyone Jack's so nice Goodluck with exams and everything!! Loved it. Can't wait for more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 4, 2009 Report Share Posted June 4, 2009 Thanks for all the comments and I am really glad you guys are loving reading it because I am having fun writing the next chapter. It wont be up for a while yet but its in progress. Exams are nearly over so it will be updated regularly *touches wood* once my exams finished if I dont get extra shifts at work Thanks to all my readers, the comments inspire me to write more. Teasers: Krista runs away or is she kidnapped? Chase returns but why? 'Naked' Jack scenes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KaiyaBlake Posted June 4, 2009 Report Share Posted June 4, 2009 Oh my, Naked Jack! If that isn't just a sentence in itself Teasers all sound good, can't wait for more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 4, 2009 Report Share Posted June 4, 2009 Just beware, this chapter is kind of confusing but I will hopefully clear it up for you soon... and no naked Jack till the next chapter but you will cope or will you??? Chapter 12 ‘So are you coming to dinner at the diner?’ Jude asked Krista, she had been withdrawn and pale since she came home that day. ‘Nope. I think a good rest and an early night is what I need’ it wasn’t out of character for Krista according to Jude because he wasn’t around for most of the year and when he was she was as good as gold. ‘Are you sure?’ ‘Yep’ ‘OK’ he didn’t think anything of it as she walked away from him heading up the stairs. As he entered the diner, it was spookily quiet which got his defences up but he tried not to react to the eyes staring at him with awe and it dawned on him that it had been 3 years since they had seen him as a scrawny 17 year old who was now 20 leading onto 21. ‘Sorry’ Martha apologised as he located their table and sat down. ‘I did ask them not to do that but…’ she shrugged her shoulders ‘obviously they didn’t listen’ ‘Its ok… I forgot how perceptive people could be’ ‘Its just hormones’ Jack added smiling and squeezing Martha’s hand making Jude feel queasy. ‘Yeh…’ Jude trailed off when he saw a stunning girl walk into the diner ‘Who is that?’ ‘Oh… that’s Emmeline’ ‘Romans daughter?!?!’ Martha laughed, as Jude couldn’t take his eyes away from her as he stared at her in complete and utter shock. ‘Yep. Hands off’ Jack warned him ‘Roman’s really protective of her and Nicole would kill you if you went near her’ ‘Oh.. yes… Nicole’ his mind wandered to Nicole who was sexy even for a 37 year old. He wouldn’t mind a crack at her’ ‘No. Jude. No’ Martha said in a bid to make him understand. Stay away from Emmeline and anyone that is close to the family… I have spent too long teaching you how to be a human being and I don’t want that messed up… got it?’ Jude put his hands up in motion of giving up ‘Got it’ ‘Good. Now we can order’ ‘And… here comes the gossip queen’ Jude whispered annoyingly under his breath just loud enough for his parents to hear but not loud enough for Colleen to hear. Martha shot him a warning glance and then ordered for herself ‘Lasagne for me please Colleen with salad on the side’ Jack ordered ‘Chicken burger, chips and garlic bread please’ ‘Jude?’ Colleen asked ‘Same as dad please minus the garlic bread’ ‘And…’ as she wrote it on her notepad ‘what would you like to drink?’ ‘Espresso’ Jack said ‘Coffee’ came from Martha ‘Coke with ice for me’ Jude said ** ‘I cant do this?’ she said as she pulled her top back on. Joe was taken aback ‘You instigated it’ he said in utter confusion and bewilderment ‘I know, I just don’t think in fact I know that I am not ready for this right now’ ‘What are you saying’ Joe said as he put his shirt back on ‘I think its time…’ she paused to get her breath ‘we go our separate ways’ ‘You cant be serious!’ ‘I am. I have to be. I have too much going on right now to be ready for anything else’ ‘What is going on?’ Joe asked ‘I love you, you know I do.’ ‘I know but you are also someone that’s always there and sometime I cant talk to people like that’ ‘Like Carrie as well’ Krista was taken aback but she stood her ground ‘Oh no, don’t swerve this way, me and Carrie have our problems but that isn’t the deciding factor here’ ‘Fine’ Joe gave up. He didn’t have the energy to try and get it out of her ‘I will wait till you realise that I am the one for you because I cant imagine life without you’ ‘You will have a long wait’ she replied ‘Fine. So be it’ Joe walked to the window and jumped out ‘I love you’ was his parting reply before he ran off to his house 3 streets away. Krista sighed and she heard some knocking about in the downstairs lounge but she wasn’t sure who it was, she wandered downstairs only to be gagged and tied up before being bundled into a car. ** Sorry about the shortness... wanted to keep the suspense Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Barbara Posted June 5, 2009 Report Share Posted June 5, 2009 You give us teasers with naked Jack scenes and now you're making us wait! That's not very nice! I hope Krista will be okay. I wonder who took her. Joe walked to the window and jumped out ‘I love you’ was his parting reply before he ran off to his house 3 streets away. Krista sighed and she heard some knocking about in the downstairs lounge but she wasn’t sure who it was, she wandered downstairs only to be gagged and tied up before being bundled into a car. It wasn't too confusing, except this sentence maybe... He jumped out the window, so I assumed they were on the ground floor but Krista later went downstairs. I hope the first floor wasn't too high then. If a boy jumped out of my window, I think he would hurt himself and land on my neighbour's fence. Good chapter Zetti! And good luck with your last exams. It's nearly over and then you can enjoy a well deserved summer holiday! More please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 5, 2009 Report Share Posted June 5, 2009 Barbara, the stairs were only a few stairs and the jump had him land on a trampoline! Sorry should have made that clearer! I will definitely update on Wednesday as that is my free day and I will have time :D Thanks for the comment and naked Jack will feature Ld Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Barbara Posted June 5, 2009 Report Share Posted June 5, 2009 Oh that explains it! Looking forward to the next chapter and naked Jack scenes ( )! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Yeh... maybe not in the next chapter Thanks for replying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KaiyaBlake Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 No naked Jack? *sighs* I guess he is worth the wait though Krista! I hope she is okay, I hope it wasn't Joe or anything Loved that Chapter. Can't wait for more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 Sorry its taken me so long.. this chapter might not the best chapter for you guys but I loved writing it.. its more gritty.. Chapter 13 ‘Hmm…’ Martha smiled as she woke up to Jack kissing her neck ‘now that’s a nice thing to wake up to’ Jack moved away for a few seconds ‘I aim to please’ and then he threw her that grin that she loved the most… he always reserved that for when he was horny. ‘Oh… no. Jack…’ Her complaints were in vain as Jack kissed her fully on the lips, she surrendered with a groan and wrapped her legs around his waist as they got more and more carried away. A few moments later when Martha was all ready to whip Jack’s shirt off; her phone rang. Jack didn’t stop kissing her but Martha pushed him off and grabbed her mobile. She moved off the bed so Jack couldn’t pull her down again as much as she would have liked him to do. ‘Hello’ ‘If you want to see your daughter again, I suggest you give the phone to your husband right now’ ‘Who is this. Have you got Krista?’ Jack spun up into action ‘what?’ he whispered and then took the phone from Martha ‘Who the hell is this’ ‘You will find out…’ ‘No…don’t hurt my daughter’ They laughed into the phone ‘we don’t want to hurt your daughter but we want you… we don’t care about her’ their tone changed in a matter of seconds ‘come to us and your daughter wont be hurt, your choice’ ‘Fine. Where?’ Martha was near to tears sitting on the floor leaning back and barely controlling herself as she shook. ‘I will see you there’ Jack replied as he hung up the phone and in total anger and frustration threw it across the wall. He dropped down and took Martha in his arms letting her cry all her tears away… she was scared ‘you cant go to them. Tell the police. Let them get her’ ‘this will never stop unless I go. I have to go. You have Jude and Krista when I get her back. ‘ ‘I cant lose you’ Martha cried out tightening her grip on him, Jack didn’t resist; he didn’t want to leave neither but he knew he had to ** ‘What if he doesn’t turn up?’ Krista heard a voice counter ‘Shane wont be happy and I can have my fun with the girl’ Krista cringed and put her arms around her knees and brought them up to her chest in an attempt to keep herself warm. Krista tried to rack her brain to try and figure who this Shane was; but she didn’t recall her father ever mentioning his name ever. Footsteps came back into the room where Krista was ‘So… your father is on his way… pretty soon you will be back home… I will have someone escort you… if you don’t listen then he will shoot… attempt to get the police involved… and..’ ‘he will shoot’ Krista finished the sentence off ‘I get it, now are you going to tell me what the hell is going on?’ ‘No…. wait till your father gets here and then you will see.’ A few moments later Jack walked in with a gun to his head. Krista who at this point had been released from the rope that tied her to the pipe. Krista wanted nothing more than to hug her dad but they wouldn’t let her near him. ‘Go now before I change my mind’ Her breathing became erratic and her body began to jerk around uncontrollably. Jack tried to shrug off his escort so he could go to her but he was instead pulled away and led to another room. He could hear her thrashing around and his heart broke. He wished more than anything that he could be there but it just wasn’t possible. ‘Let me go to her. Let me say goodbye then you can do whatever the hell you want to me. I don’t care’ Jack stared at his captor in the face till he waved his hand ‘let him see her.. 3 minutes’ Jack ran back into the room and saw Krista coming around, she looked around still in shock. Jack took her into his arms ‘Shh… baby… I am here…’ She couldn’t control her tears and she cried so much and before jack knew it. She was being taken away from her ‘I love you’ he screamed at her so she could hear him. ‘I love you’ his voice faded away to nothing. He at that moment decided not to let his bunch of thugs take over his life. He wasn’t going to bow down to what they wanted. He had a family waiting for him and he was going to back to them. ‘So..’ Jack asked ‘Who are you and what do you want?’ ‘You killed my wife’ Jack’s eyes narrowed; he had no idea what the hell was going on. ‘Who?’ His captor was taken aback by the confusion displaying in Jack’s eyes. ‘Kylie Deeks’ ‘Oh. Sam.. you mean’ ‘Kylie aka Sam. Yes’ ‘I never killed her, she killed herself’ The thought of Sam still haunted him… she was carrying his baby before she died and she was someone he truly cared about. ‘What do you want?’ ‘Revenge’ he said simply ‘Fine. Kill me. It isn’t going to bring her back’ ‘No it wont, but it will make me feel better’ he gestured to the person behind him to move forward and the next thing that Jack felt was a piercing pain in his lower back as a knife was pushed in. He screamed in pain and the next thing he heard before he passed away was ‘Justice has been served. Lets go’ Jack lay there and the last thing that came to his mind was the night that they first had spent together in each other arms. The night where their first eldest son had been born. The son that he had hoped would find them one day.. Jack however didn’t know that help was on the way… all he had to do was hold on.. his life was slipping away but he just needed to hold on. Next Chapter: Will Jack hold on? Krista is haunted by her kidnapping Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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