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it's a one shot :P

Interesting. I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I felt that more description could have gone a long way, so that, it wouldn't be just people who watch H&A that could read it and understand, but more - if we knew / could see more of what they were wearing, their expressions, their appearances, etc, then even those who don't know H&A could read as a simple story - if you get me?

But ... interesting where you took this ... not something i was expecting :o

Nice job :)

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Interesting. I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I felt that more description could have gone a long way, so that, it wouldn't be just people who watch H&A that could read it and understand, but more - if we knew / could see more of what they were wearing, their expressions, their appearances, etc, then even those who don't know H&A could read as a simple story - if you get me?

I don't mind at all, I welcome constructive criticism, it's how writers like myself and others improve! :D I've been thinking bout what you've said since you posted it and it does make sense. I could have been a lot more descriptive. It's too late now though, but I'll definitely keep it in mind next time I write another fic :wink:

Thanks guys, glad you enjoyed it :)

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I like the end line :lol:

That was a great read, Shan. In my many years of reading slash stories, I rarely venture into femmeslash, but I gave this a shot because A) The pairing was rather interesting (Despite being a Geoff/Nic shipper, I like to venture away from expected pairings every now and then!) and B) I read an LA fic you did once and remembered how good you were at writing femmeslash. I enjoyed it, anyway. It was quite cute and fluffy, which is always good in one shots. The dancing was really sweet :D

The writing was super. :D

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Wow, thanks! That LA fic... that's going back a bit :lol:. I initially was a bit wary of the pairing because when you see the names Ruby/Nicole together it does look a tad random.

I'm glad everyone enjoyed it though! I'll probably write another Ruby/Nicole one-shot shortly. I just need to find some more prompts because I always get stuck for ideas.

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