Eli Posted February 12, 2009 Report Share Posted February 12, 2009 Thanks Yeah, they are the best match, aren't they? I still can't believe they paired him up with Rachel rather than giving him and Jazz a real chance Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I love music Posted February 12, 2009 Report Share Posted February 12, 2009 Nice to have you back in the fanfics, Eli! You don't seem to have written anything for ages - or if you have I've missed it. I don't get much time for reading most stories on here but this being an Eli one-shot I had to check it out and I wasn't disappointed. Well, I nearly was about something but I'll tell you more about that nearer the end of this review. There were some really great lines. I've picked out my three faves from the first part of the fic: No roof is big enough to contain that kind of deep, dark despair. Because with her death it suddenly became a lot harder not to allow myself to touch that dark, definite and painfully final feeling called acceptance. Sometimes floating around and bumping into coincidences sounds a lot safer. But this was my very favourite part of the fic: As I walk up to her house, I can hear music from the other side of it. She's probably on the balcony, enjoying her life; bathing in sun rays and listening to songs she discovered in her youth. Well written tho this was, I thought it was in danger of being too gloomy and introspective and, yes, that was despite the glimmers of hope about acceptance. But I got to that part and wow! The fic was lifted right out of the heaviness and became a great story. I love that those two sentences came so unexpectedly and, not only that, it was an instant image. Very, very cleverly done. Well done, Eli, great one-shot and the last line about Tony taking a chance was perfect. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
homeandawayforever23 Posted February 13, 2009 Report Share Posted February 13, 2009 Eli, I really loved this oneshot. You wrote the emotions and feelings very well. Great work! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Zoe~ Posted February 13, 2009 Report Share Posted February 13, 2009 I liked reading that one shot Eli, you wrote Tonys emotions really well Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TachelHolden Posted February 13, 2009 Report Share Posted February 13, 2009 (edited) Wow i really love it I just stumbled across and started reading and once i started i couldn't stop , well done Eli. Edited February 13, 2009 by CHARL3N3x Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eli Posted February 13, 2009 Report Share Posted February 13, 2009 Thankyou so much, guys ILM, you're right, I haven't written anything in ages, but a few days ago I decided I HAD to break the writer's block, because I really want to write some more fanfics again, so I wrote this piece. Hopefully I have more stuff coming up, I'm thinking possibly a Charlie oneshot next. Anyways, I'm glad you like it, thanks for the review Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lise Posted February 14, 2009 Report Share Posted February 14, 2009 I hope you do write that Charlie one-shot. There aren't that many (are there any?) fics on here about Charlie. I will have to keep an eye out for it. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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