Symphony Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Oh no poor Belle that her parents are dead - and at what her uncle is doing ... abuse is all too common in the world Hope she confides in Aden.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taniya_K Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Belle's uncle! I can't believe her parents are dead! I feel so sorry for both her and Aden... I really hope they get back onto track soon. She needs to tell someone. Especially now that she's pregnant! Belle's thoughts at the end was just too sad. I understand how she might be confused. Update soon! xoxo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adelle2008 Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Hey guys, for those of you who read my fan fictions I would just like to say a big thank you. (Laura, Taniya, Red Ranger, Sympthony, pig & others). But I've noticed that alot more people read and comment on the other fics, I'm not trying to sound ungrateful for your lovely comments. I just want to know how I can improve my fan fics so that more people read them and also enjoy them, I love reading feedback because it helps me to improve my writing. So this is your chance, please tell me what I'm doing wrong, give me a few tips! (please dont be too harsh!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LAURZY! Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Erm...i honestly don't know how you can improve it. I dont think your doing anything wrong. You seem to get better as you do a different story, i know that wasn't much help lol, but that's my honest opinion! I love your fics Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adelle2008 Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Okay, thanks anyway! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taniya_K Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 I've got to agree. I really love what you do with your fics. Each one is different, but the all work. Honestly, they're great. I just wish things weren't so sad for Aden and Belle xoxo Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Ranger 1 Posted January 11, 2009 Report Share Posted January 11, 2009 Oh my gosh, just read that last chapter.Poor Belle doesn't have a lot of luck, does she? You've asked for advice and so I'm going to try and offer some and I hope you don't think I'm out of line.The only real criticism I have is that you sometimes seem in a hurry to move on to your next plot development.Usually what you come up with is very good and very enjoyable to read but it might be an idea to explore a situation more fully moving on to the next one.Hope no-one minds me saying so. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Miss Dreamy Posted January 12, 2009 Report Share Posted January 12, 2009 And I know mummy and daddy are in heaven now, safe and no longer suffering. I love you mum, I love you dad. I’ll miss you and I’ll never ever forget you.” So sad! Why did they have to die? Man, Aden and Belle are being raised in a pretty toxic environment! I’m fifteen and pregnant, and have no boyfriend how does that work? Oh dear! Poor Belle. I wonder what she'll do now that she's pregnant with her uncle's baby!! Can't wait for the next chapter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adelle2008 Posted January 12, 2009 Report Share Posted January 12, 2009 Thanks everybody for your comments. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adelle2008 Posted January 12, 2009 Report Share Posted January 12, 2009 sometimes seem in a hurry to move on to your next plot development That's true, I'll try and develop the storyline more. Usually what you come up with is very good and very enjoyable to read Thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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