amz89 Posted June 29, 2008 Report Share Posted June 29, 2008 Loved that chapter colleen is the worst for secrets. Poor Tony more soon please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 29, 2008 Report Share Posted June 29, 2008 Great Fic Missy! I hope Tony and Rachel are ok. Aww Jack and Martha Baby Holden Aarrghhh Colleen! More soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LisaCarmen Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 CHAPTER 5 Tony: ... Hayley? Hales? *shakes her* Please wake up. Hayley?? Hayley: *Slowly comes round and is very confused* Tony? what... wh... Tony: Are you Okay? did they hurt you? Hayley: Who... did who hurt me? where am I? Tony: *Sigh* You didn't see who it was? Hayley: *thinks* the last thing i remember.... **FLASHBACK** Hayley with baby Noah, in the Back garden. Someone comes from behind and grabs her. Hayley: Noah.. wheres Noah? **FLASHBACK** Noah Crying as hayley is shoved in the back of a van Hayley: Oh my god *stands up* Noah.... where is he??... Scott isnt home... he's visiting Tasha and Robbie .... *Gets worked up* Tony: Hayley love calm down, I'm sure Noah is fine, someone will have heard him crying, a neighbour. Hayley: But.... **A car pulls up outside and the door slams** Hayley: *Shouts* NOAH ... NOAH The door to the barn opens and another person is thrown inside... Hayley: Where's my son?!?!.... what have you done with him The door closes again The body makes a slight noise.... *Tony shuffels over and removed the bag from the head and sits in shock* Tony and Hayley: .... Sally? 88888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888 Meanwhile Alf has woken from his sleep and heads to the kitchen to make some Dinner. And just at theat moment Ric and Matilda return home from their walk. Ric: Hey grandad Alf: Heya Mate, Mattie Matilda: Any news? Alf: Nah Love *Jack and Martha appear at the door* Jack: Hey guys, is it okay if we have a chat Everyone: Yeah.... *everyone sits on the sofa* Jack: I think its about time we inform the police about this.... I won't be allowed to head the enquiry but i'll do my best to find out the nessesary information first hand. Matilda: Finally *runs to the phone* Jack,Martha and ric: *stand up* Mattie NO! Jack: This needs to be done in a calm manner Matilda: Is already franticly dialing Ric: *runs over and battles with matilda for the phone* Matilda: Ric no! leave it **They struggle with it and mattilda breaks down... and as Ric manages to get it off her his thumb hits the red button* MESSAGE - DELETED The all look at each other in shock ..... TO BE CONTINUED Has noooooo-one guessed whats going on yet? I'm trying to drop as many hints as it can Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
amz89 Posted July 2, 2008 Report Share Posted July 2, 2008 Poor tony & Hayley, hope noah is okay more soon please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LisaCarmen Posted July 7, 2008 Report Share Posted July 7, 2008 CHAPTER 6 (a very short chapter... just to drop some more hints) In the summer bay house, all are still reeling over the fact that theres a possibility they just deleted a message from Tony or Rachel. Martha: What are we gonna do? Jack: We don't know anything, we don't even know if its from them **All look at jack** Jack: Okay,I'll get onto the station. They can possibly track the message 8888888888888888888888888888888888888888888888 Meanwhile, Sally has woken up and is confused. Tony: Sally, whats going on. Sally: I dont know, hayley? what are you doing here Hayley: Your guess is as good as mine *Pause* Sally: Pippa, Cassie .... They don't know where I am. I was supposed to be picking Chloe up. Tony: Its fine, don't worry about that now. **Car pulls up and there are footsteps** 3 more bodies are thrown in and the door slams closed for one final time Tony: *takes the bags off all three and sits back* What the hell is going on? Sally: Danni? Hayley: Kirsty? Tony: Leah? TO BE CONTINUED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LisaCarmen Posted August 3, 2008 Report Share Posted August 3, 2008 CHAPTER 7 It had now been 10 days since Rachel and Tony went missing. Police had managed to track the call made by Tony and had organised a number of police officers to surround the barn where the prisoners where. Joining them was a worried jack and martha, Cassie, Irene, Scott, Kane, Shelly and Reese. Cassie: Why aren't you going in??, they could be dead for all we know. Police officer: Ma'am please, stay calm, and quiet.... **Inside the barn** The misterious person has still not reveiled themself, and is hiding under a balaclava Kirsty: Please, just let us go Danni: Kirst, don't! As the woman in black paces up and down the barn she utters the words: Who called them? How did you manage it!!! You've ruined everything! someone is going to get hurt!!! **All the girls sob as the woman pulls out a gun from her jacket** **Outside** Jack: *Holds Martha in his arms and kisses her head* It going to be okay *worried face* Police officer: *Talking quietly to the others* Okay, we have to find another entrance somewhere, *points to a few randomers* you take that end,.... and you both look over to the left. *They do so* Cassie: *To Irene* Whats going on, why are they making us wait ..... Kane: LOOK! we all feel the same, now shut up and let them do what they have to *walks into the distance* Cassie: *Sobs in Irenes arms* **In the barn** Hayley: Just tell us who you are, and what you want!! *Silence* Tony: *Get up* OH FOR GOD SAKE, TAKE THE DAMN MASK OFF Woman: *Points the gun at tony* Oh you crossed the line *everyone gasps and the girls sob* *Outside* Jack: *to martha* You'll see they will all be fine we just have to beli...... **BANG.... gun shot from inside** --------------------- TO BE CONTINUED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dee83 Posted August 25, 2008 Report Share Posted August 25, 2008 Hope everyones ok and can`t wait for the next chapter to see wait happens update soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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