Skykat Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 (edited) Hey great start. I love Sally fics and this is an idea nobody seems to have taken on yet. Some great imagery in this and some stuff I can really buy into. The hotels and the relationships between them. You know the characters and it shows, Sally is really in character and well written. I look forward to seeing where you take this. Edited August 3, 2008 by Cerise Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
maccaz Posted June 20, 2008 Report Share Posted June 20, 2008 Good start. Keep it going. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
J+M4EVA! Posted June 21, 2008 Report Share Posted June 21, 2008 (edited) great start cant wait for more Edited June 21, 2008 by J+M4EVA! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inactive User Posted June 21, 2008 Report Share Posted June 21, 2008 Great start. Liked it. Update soon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
defying_gravity Posted June 21, 2008 Report Share Posted June 21, 2008 Awesome idea for a fic!! i love sally fics! this fic is off to a great start. please update soon Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I love music Posted June 21, 2008 Report Share Posted June 21, 2008 It's good and very well written but it needs a little more emotion in the beginning. Just before Sally throws the rose out on the water she might have been thinking something like "Who were you, Amber? Oh, I know you were my niece, I know what you looked like from the photos, I know your likes and dislikes, Miles has told me...but I never knew you. Did you ever look up at the sky the way Pippa does and wonder at the world? Did you ever try to catch raindrops on your tongue or draw faces in a steamed up window and then wipe them away before anyone saw like I used to? I wish I'd known you." But, hey. it's a great start. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
maccaz Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 Vinnie's back!? Update soon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
defying_gravity Posted June 23, 2008 Report Share Posted June 23, 2008 omg that was an amazing chapter!! arghhh vinnie's back!!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
maccaz Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Interesting...wonder who that guy is?? Update ASAP. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
I love music Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 I love the way this is written, it makes very pleasant reading. I particulary liked the scene in the restaurant where Sally is talking to the waitress, I totally warmed to that character. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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