Zetti Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 Aww poor Jacky Poor man Nice oneshot. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
valli Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 It was a really good oneshot with a very interesting twist Aww poor Jack. Lost a girl because he cries after sex Martha really got a nasty surprise there, didn't she? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
vale4eva Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 (edited) Dedicated to Krystal. (Jamey-Maria). And her dad. Who is a swell guy. ;) Without them this would not exist. And so I'd be very bored right now. I knew it! As I said on msn, as soon as I read that ^ I knew what was coming! What have you done Nicole His manhood will forever suffer as a result of this fic Why was I left sharing a bed with this... pansy? Crying into his pillow because a girl touched his “winky” in a “magical” way? *Rachel Laughs her ass off* You killed me with this oneshot lol OK, firstly, I loved the descriptions, and I can imagine how difficult it would be to write an entire one shot in a POV style. So bravo for that! It was a perfect mixture of sweet fluff, and comedy ... it worked incredibly well. I loved how you included all the aspects of their first date as well, it really brought back the memories Pity the ending showed just how much of a pansy Jack really is Well, fantastic writing, as always, you know I love your work. You always write something original and somehow manage to put a smile on my face! And thanks to Krystals dad, for telling it how it really is Great oneshot Nic! PS. Jacks still my hero Edited January 23, 2008 by vale4eva Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Barbara Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 You did a great job. It's a really good and funny one shot! The beginning of the date was great and very romantic. I was happy when I read they had sex. But the end was so . I really didn't expect it! I wouldn't want to be in Martha's shoes now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dolly-999 Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 lol, didn't expect that, Jack crying? Poor guy now she's walked out on him. Loved it though, nice to read something different. Good Job Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kaciexox Posted January 23, 2008 Report Share Posted January 23, 2008 My first reaction after reading this was then Brilliant writing. Loved the date, as Rachel said, brought back some fond memories Jack was so sweet throughout the night but then !!!! Hilarious. As you said, a twist that would change JMs whole life. Great descriptions and an unusual twist. A very good one shot Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
*caitie* Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 Loved this!!1 your descriptions of things are so well done!!! Update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tasha Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 I was in complete and utter shock when i read that last part, the next morning, with Jack crying. I was trying so hard to control my laughter, my brother was asking me what i was doing so many times. OMG that was just hilarious. I realised after i read the crying part why you were dedicating this to Krystals dad Great writing Nicole, as alwayz Poor Martha Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xGlowingAngelx Posted January 24, 2008 Report Share Posted January 24, 2008 Why was I left sharing a bed with this... pansy? Crying into his pillow because a girl touched his “winky” in a “magical” way? !!!! LMFAO!!!!!! I'm sorry, the immature side of me escapes occasionally. LMAO!!! That was just funny! Very amusing and great fic, Nicole! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eli Posted March 10, 2008 Report Share Posted March 10, 2008 Haha, an absolutely brilliant fic! I stumbled across it by coincidence because I was gonna add a link to its comments, and when I read the note you added at the end I just HAD to read it! Great work, I just loved it all, especially the last part and the way you ended it. Well done! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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