Zetti Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 Yehh make it Sally!!!! It would be awesome!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack_is_exposed Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 I've just read this story, very slowly but I did manage to, lol at Martha taking forever to realise she lost her ring and who set the house on fire and why? could it be someone connected to Ollie, as for Ollie, i feel sorry for the poor Kid, can't wait to see who the parent is, how big of a shock will it be I wonder (Is Martha or Sally old enough to have a kid Ollie age?) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bttb-rox! Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 Thank you for the comments, guys! And welcome to the forum, jack_is_exposed . How could Sally be Ollie's mother if Sally found out that Ollie's mother is still alive? There could always be a twist, though . Next update... Chapter 11 EXT. THE BACHLOR PAD – NIGHT Jack: Dad! Beth: Noooo, Tony! Beth falls to the ground We see the burnt down house and the devastation from a birds eye view Lucas: We’ve got to do something, Jack! Beth: He’s never going to make it out alive. Jack: Beth, just stay calm. Everything is going to be alright. Beth: Jack, Tony is trapped in a burning building! Don’t say everything is going to be okay, because it isn’t! Jack: Look, I’m going to see what’s happening with the fire fighters. INT. THE BACHLOR PAD – NIGHT Tony is struggling to get himself free from the debris, but he manages to dislodge part of it and climb out the other side Beth: I’ve got to do something! Jack: Beth, stay calm. Dad is going to be okay. Beth just looks at Jack Lucas: Jack, dad has been in there for ages. Can’t someone go in and look for him? Jack: The firefighters are doing everything they possibly can. INT. HANNAH’S HOUSE – NIGHT. Hannah hears a knock at the door and goes to answer it. Preview: Who is Hannah speaking to? Will Tony make it out alive?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roccoluver Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 I refuse to believe you would ever kill Tony. Mmm, what is that Hannah up to? update soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bttb-rox! Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 I refuse to believe you would ever kill Tony. I haven't decided what's going to happen to HotDad yet, but let's just say that in the update I'll post tomorrow things aren't looking good . Thanks, Jane . I just found out that that's your name - is it okay if l call you that from now on? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roccoluver Posted June 16, 2007 Report Share Posted June 16, 2007 I refuse to believe you would ever kill Tony. I haven't decided what is going to happen to HotDadd yet, but lets just say in the update I'll post tomorrow, things aren't looking good . Thanks Jane ...I just found out thats your name, so I'll call you that from now on if thats okay?? HotDad! can't die and yup you can call me Jane, its easier to write than Roccoluver Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bttb-rox! Posted June 17, 2007 Report Share Posted June 17, 2007 Okay...Jane . Next update... Chapter 12 Hannah: Hey, sis, I didn’t think you would get back tonight. The way you described that traffic, it sounded awful. Susan: Well, I’m here now. Erm...I might go to bed. Hannah: Oh, okay. You're sure that I can’t make you a coffee or something? Susan: No, I’ll be fine, thanks. Hannah: Right, well I think I’ll head off too. Night. Susan: Night. Hannah: ...Are you okay? You just seem a bit distracted? Susan: Honestly, I’m fine. It's just been a long day that’s all. Hannah: If that’s all it is. Susan: It is. Hannah: Night, then. Susan: Night. They both walk off to their bedrooms INT – THE BATCHELOR PAD – NIGHT Tony is free from the rubble but is still trapped inside by the flames Tony: HELP! Lucas: Hey, did you guys hear that? Jack: What? Tony: HELP! Lucas: That. It sounded like dad! Jack: That’s because it was. Jack can see Tony from where he is standing Jack: We're going to get you out of there. Tony: Be quick! The flames are still getting worse! Fireman: Don’t worry, mate, we’ll have you out of here in no time. Beth and Matilda smile INT – HANNAHS HOUSE – NIGHT Susan is looking through photos in her room and picks up a birth certificate with Ollie’s name on it. Preview for the next couple of chapters: Why has Susan got Ollie's birth certificate? Will Tony be okay? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Roccoluver Posted June 17, 2007 Report Share Posted June 17, 2007 That was a shock Tony better be okay... more soon please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jack_is_exposed Posted June 17, 2007 Report Share Posted June 17, 2007 Thanks for the welcome BTTB-roxs. Great updates, I wonder why Susan has Ollie birth certificate. mmm is all as it seems? Poor Tony, this all Jack's fault, beth should deck him one Update soon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zetti Posted June 18, 2007 Report Share Posted June 18, 2007 Loads of chapters for em to tread am very happy More please am very intrigued and no killing Tony. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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