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This was a really well written entry. Not being a Jack/Martha fan (probably not a good thread to admit that in :P ) I actually found the chemistry between the characters in this really believable. There was some great writing but I'm in danger of going into review mode and I've already reviewed...Really great story though, you're a great writer and I was very impressed with your first attempt at a competition entry. Well done.xx

Moving to the library btw before it gets too many replies and I start cursing you for having too much work to do :P ...I'll leave you a link though in the main forum.

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^That sounds wrong on so many levels :)

Geebee how slow am I? No one told me about this. Maybe I should do as I'm told an 'open my eyes' from time to time, lol. People have already been in, reviewed and started having a general movie discussion. I think your wrong. I think the chemistry between Jack and Martha is what you do best :wub: Like that bit where he was pushing her into the bedroom after complaining about being late. I loved that, it put a huge smile in my face and made me giggle (and I never giggle!) Because I'm a really, really sad romantic :) And there is nothing wrong with pure fluff, lol. It would have been totally FINE without the killer ending, lol. But it was brill and unexpected so it was a good technique. But you still killed Jack! *laughs quietly* At least he had his shirt off when he died. ^_^

For your first, or just in general that was fantastic. You use great emotive language and your writing style is nice. Plus the fact that you wrote about J&M has nothing to do with it . . .*whistles innocently* You should write more. You have talent! :D

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