Arachnophobia (by emmasi) - comments

[Nicom]

I know phobia's aren't funny, but...

Flipping hell that was funny!

I had one of those silent laughs, because I thought it was stupid to laugh at the computer so much and we have a decorator downstairs. My hand was over my mouth, and i had tears in my eyes.

I absolutely loved it! That sooo made me laugh! I just love how you gave us his thoughts. That was brilliant! Best funny fic ever!! You've done some funny stuff, but that has to be the top. I just simply loved it.

Well done!

[emmasi]

Ah well I didn't mean it to be funny, but I had a feeling it might be taken that way. Particularly when he screamed, heh.

No worries .

[SfanS]

IT was 3/4 of the way being read down that I reaLised something-the spider wasn't the criminal holding Martha hostage!

[home and away fanatic2]

Love the fic.

It is the in the best five I have read

Edited December 16, 2006 by home and away fanatic2

[Nicom]

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2. Were there any lines or moments that stood out to you? Why did they stand out?

3. Did the author use descriptive language and/or emotive language to draw you into the story?

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I don't mean to be mean, but maybe if you could edit your post? The guidelines are fairly new anyway, so I understand you've probably not seen them before.

Edited December 16, 2006 by Nicom

[emmasi]

Thanks Nicom ;).

home and away fanatic2, this is probably a oneshot, but I haven't quite decided. There is definitely room for more, but whether I wanna go back into skin-crawling spider territory again... *shudder*... I'm not counting on it, but we'll see. Anyway, I'd love to know what you think of it

IT was 3/4 of the way being read down that I reaLised something-the spider wasn't the criminal holding Martha hostage!

Hm... that's... kind of concerning. Did anyone else get confused? I edited some of the spider "he"s to "it"s to clear it up a bit better. You should have read it before I edited. Even I got lost

[home and away fanatic2]

I thought the exact same thing.

I was pretty confused when I thought Jack was talking to a spider lol.

[emmasi]

lol. You know what I think happened? I was watching Family Guy before I wrote this - the episode where the hotel manager says "We've got some bad roaches here," and he opens the bathroom and there's two giant cockraoches wearing bandanas and holding knives.

Cockroach 1: "Hey man, you're on our turf!"

Cockroach 2: "Man I'm gonna cut you up so bad you gonna... you gonna wish I no cut you up so bad!"

Perhaps it prompted me to write about a knife-weidling spider by accident

[loobieloo]

haha! I loved it! I found it unbelieveably funny, and I do have to admit I thought the spider was the criminal. I was wondering weather martha could hear the spider or not and if she could why she didn't find it strange lol. and I was wondering how a spider could hold a knife or a gun haha!

great fic though, its a shame its a oneshot

[emmasi]

^^Maybe it's not a shame at all if it was that confusing, lol. Well... I *think* it made sense to me. Maybe I should have waited more than three minutes between finishing it and posting it . Somthing to think about for next time.