Eden Posted August 22, 2006 Report Share Posted August 22, 2006 Great start, seems interesting, . Please update soon. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sevenpuddings Posted August 22, 2006 Report Share Posted August 22, 2006 Okay, from the introduction, it sounds good. I enjoy your writing style, and hopefully the next update will be that little bit longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amir Posted August 22, 2006 Report Share Posted August 22, 2006 Thanks Eden and Jess. Yepp, it will be for sure longer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xsamie Posted August 22, 2006 Report Share Posted August 22, 2006 Ooh i like it, it seems really interesting. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amir Posted August 23, 2006 Report Share Posted August 23, 2006 Thanks Sammie! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amir Posted August 24, 2006 Report Share Posted August 24, 2006 Sorry, chapter has been delayed. My muse isn't working. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amir Posted September 3, 2006 Report Share Posted September 3, 2006 Okay...Here is the second chapter. Sorry for the very long delay. "So, how's your love life going?" Cassie asked Aaron. "Well, I do have my eye out on someone..." Aaron looked into Cassie eyes with depth. "What is it?" Cassie asked. Aaron quickly replied, "Oh nothing, just in my own world as usual". "Oh and where may that be?" Cassie walked around an anxious Aaron and said "I know you like me, Aaron, just admit it. I mean, who wouldn't?!" Aaron crossed his eyebrows and chased an amused Cassie into the diner. "Woah!" Aaron exclaimed as he crashed into her. As they stared into each others eyes deeply, Cassie began to feel uncomfortable and said, "Oh, well, umm... I’d better be off now…" As she backed away from him, Aaron said, "Erm, okay, we'll meet up some other time, okay?" "Sure!" Cassie replied, as she ran out of the Diner. "**** off!" shouted Ric, as he shoved Drew. "Make me," Drew replied as Ric walked away. "Listen, I'm sorry mate." Drew lied, following. "What part of '**** off' do you not understand?! Just leave me alone, you maniac." "Just listen to me, Dude. I want all this drama to end." He kicked Ric and ran away, in the pretence of throwing a tantrum. Ric sighed and ran after him, realising that he would be at home preparing dinner. "Hey, Drew, I'm sorry about before." Drew’s face split into a cheeky grin as he turned around and said, "It's okay, Man. Just sit down, I'm making some pasta." Drew turned back around, hiding another cheeky, evil grin. "Erm, could I please use the toilet?" asked Ric. "Sure. Just through there." "Thanks," he replied. Drew quickly returned to the kitchen and added two cups off chilli powder to the pasta. Ric returned and Drew handed him a plate of pasta. “Right, here you go", Drew said, grinning to himself. Ric ate one piece and unbeknown to Drew, this had no effect on him. As Drew ate a spoonful of his food, his face turned a bright red colour. "What's wrong?" asked Ric, panicking. "Oh, God! You're choking!". He quickly ran to the phone and rang an ambulance. "Be quick, I really don't think he's okay!" Amanda walked into Belle’s bedroom to find her lay sulking on her bed. "Honey, please don't be upset. I'm doing this for your own good.” "Sorry? You mean your own good," Belle retorted. "Do not talk back to me like that, missy!" "Oh, I will!" Belle replied, confidently. "That's it! You are grounded!" Amanda yelled. "No thanks." Amanda covered her ears with her hands and smirked. "I can't hear you!" she said. "Well you might not for some time!" Belle retorted, walking towards Amanda and slapping her ear. "Luke… I don’t know how to tell you this…” Matilda couldn’t find the words. Lucas let go of her hand and she walked away, Lucas running after her. He grabbed her hand and she turned to look into his face, her eyes shining with tears. “I'm pregnant, and the baby's not yours!” she cried. “Now, let go of me!” She ran away, leaving Lucas to take in what she had just said. As Rachel dressed for work, she heard a knock at the door. She answered and was shocked by what she found. PREVIEW: Aaron fights to win over Cassie. Drew is fighting for his life. Rachel makes a shocking discovery about Matilda. Lucas tries to stay strong. Amanda gives up. A Summer Bay teenager commits a crime. But who? Thanks to Liz for her wonderful proof-reading. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
matty and luke forever Posted September 3, 2006 Report Share Posted September 3, 2006 That was great!!! Can't wait for more!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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