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Would you kill one of your favourite Characters? You ask. hmmm I just don't know you have a few and they all seem to be in this very dangerous story
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You could say that Dimitri had well and truly flew over the cuckoo's nest and far far beyond What a very strange lollipop man he was
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Your very talented at writing action scenes I thought that was brilliant.. I think you capture the darkened world of prison atmosphere prefect Well to the best that I imagine it to be anyways. Dimitri if I'm honest I'm not too sad to see go what a totally useless Fed agent he was Over time I was questioning if he wasn't just a tad cuckoo mental Mark being Ducky's trained dog was clever, because in the end he had turned out to be his very own attack dog. I wasn't expecting that I thought Mark was too weak and quiet Its always the quiet ones you have to watch though.. Well that was a slightly to exciting piece of bedtime reading for me Its made me feel wide awake
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COME ON SKYE'S TEAM YOU CAN DO IT... No way should she be kept prisoner in her bedroom
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Half written alright your a writing machine.. Seen Reservoir Dogs can't say I remember much about it Maybe I was that disturbed I blanked it
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Ok.......Hmmmm....err......ok.......what? Yes I think I would have to choose the option of dying Not only would it be wrrong but how would one get turned on enough to be able to perform good enough to please a nutjob like Ducky? I guess it pays to be gay in prison so maybe Kyle can just think of Aaron Josh though I'm not sure. Shame the drugs are wearing off now maybe they should have gotten totally stoned and not able to stand beforehand And Brax with his deluxe real-feel dildo, harness, and horse’s bridle. Next chapter are we going to have a scene with Brax and Ricky puttting it to good use? They could both do with abit of fun down at the ranch How did you think of that? One things for sure isn't a boring job waitressing for Brax... haha Maybe I'm abit sick but I found Smithy having a song about rape for his ringtone funny Heath might be dead we don't know what happened after he was shot so that video message could be a trick
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Going insane changes even the sweetest of people haha
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Its like a prison I think as you say LOCKED IN You get out in my case causing as much trouble as you can
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Just spotted this one. Another of your stories to add to the back catalogue of your stories that I'm working my way through Very dark once again I guess it's quite fitting being about someone who is blind afterall its not going to be all rainbows and la la brightness hmm maybe I could work on something like haha But anyway your first ever story was very cool and dare I say touching (Torture victims were treated better than this.) Yes I have often thought the same when having been in hospital
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I will keep my excitement Caged while I'm waiting shall I?
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It's nothing other than my pleasure haha
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That was nothing......But perfection. Nothing other than a work of art.. Nothing but a masterpeice Nothing but masterful. There's nothing better than some silly puns is there? But I'm afraid I have nothing left in the tank so I can say nothing.. Direct quote from youself (The one thing you can always be sure of in my stories is that things can always get worse) That made me laugh because oh boy didn't they half? Funny now that even Kyle and Josh are both sort of quoting your words there And how right they were with Heath getting shot.. Calvin's just won himself the dimest goon award though. If Heath is dead Calvin's left himself in rather the prickle He can do nothing more but hope and wait now.
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Yes I sipped tequila I stopped mid shot I don't think I have ever downed any drink of any kind in one go always need to take a short break lemon juice should only ever be used for pancakes oh and fish otherwise it is just to sour haha
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Kat sure does think alot of herself The question is has she ever had any credibility or is that only in her mind Maybe it is good she's poking her nose in like a dog in heat I want to see her suffer I'm starting to wonder if Dimitri is even a cop How dare he toy with me bringing out his lollipop again. Well hopefully Kyle and Josh are off to La La La land for awhile there with the drugs they were taking. At least they will be happy for awhile I guess My god they do need some kind of happiness haha I have never smoke joints or played russian roulette before but I have tasted tequila I only managed a shot an half so Heath having five my goodness I think he will be caught once Cavlin finishes dreaming about his bacon sandwich that is Sorry just reading this now.. I have been having a busy grand time of it aswell.
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I really thought Zac was going to be left behind. Hopefully he makes it back. VJ doesn't sound that good either Oh Leah looking out the window at the storm Never a good sign when characters do that Always a foreshadowing of doom Be careful to stay quiet in that library Nobody likes a finger shushing librarian..
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I really can't take her seriously . I wonder what her super power is?
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She might surprise us . But I'm sure she was mentioned in a earlier chapter where the Feds were keeping her in the dark because nobody trusted her haha
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Oh I enjoyed the Heath and Cavlin scene I know it was meant as torture but Cavlin seemed to be a happy chappy didn't he? I thought all his waffle about protein shakes was amusing and Heath's despration and hope of geting to taste some McDonalds Cavlin didn't even give him his gherkin . Oh and who has a McDonalds without getting a McFlurry for pudding what is this maddess? But never the less Heath's in a right prickle As for everything else I'm not sure Kat will help she will most likely get herself caught I knew Ducky would have extra plans for Kyle and Josh The drug deal was never going to be his endgame.
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Interesting story I'm not sure if I believe in a afterlife but its a cool twist with Kyle and Rooco watching over everyone.. Hopefully Kyle's ghost will somehow manage to show Heath that he is forgiven in the end. The Kyle and Rosie date was very funny. What a wacky girl Rosie was, and it's a shame they never got together. Sometimes opposites attract. Loved that the only things she knew about Kyle was he kidnapped Casey and what sort of boxers he wore
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Did Brax ever cry? I will let you off Ash being in his underpants given the scene took place in the middle of the night
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Heath is in a right prickle isn't he? If he does manage to smack Smithy with the shovel (It is him holding him hostage isn't it?) If he does manage to get the element of surprise that might cause trouble for Josh and Kyle still because that would mean a spanner being thrown into the works when it comes to getting this drug deal done and dusted.. Even then I doubt it will be that easy to escape. Oh my goodness Brax cried something to highlight here and plus Ricky was left holding the baby Another very rare thing to happen Their all pretty dumb though whatever they tell Bianca I doubt she will believe them Who knows though she might be too distracted by the sight of Ash in his boxers, who's advice was top notch by the way. Yeah tell her as little as possible because that won't be at all suspicious haha They should all beware the bitch resting face of Bianca.
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So the treasure hunt race is nearly upon us exciting. These buried items sound quite supernatural to me and kind of dangerous but very cool.
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Smithy maybe a little unhinged but if he can see the murderous little glint in Josh's eye I don't think he should push him that much because I would think his very high on Josh's hit list.. Its good to know Kyle might feel bad for nearly killing Jae. But look on the the bright side he might have impressed the Duck haha Agent Lee who it seems is just winging it. Brax and the angry pouting lunging blonde might have to sort this mess out themselves.. Who would have guessed that the Feds would be utterly useless?
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I don't quite know how to answer this I'm speechless for once.. But it was very late at night when I read the chapter I must have been high on caffeine teach me not to drink coffee before bed haha
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Doris sure is a little beauty isn't she? What a hot mama Moustache. little piggy eyes and thinning hair, oh and the way she tucks into her food sigh I'm in love Favourite character alert Well you did say action packed and you wrote that fight scene great I'm very surprised Jae's still alive sounded like Kyle turned his face into nothing more than messy mush. I did find the scene with Ash funny with him talking into his microphone, and I couldn't help but think of him over acting when he was going into his full on fit of rage with Agent Lee. Heath's down in the boiler room is that so you can make him all hot and sweaty? And looking like his rubbed himself down with baby oil for a later fight scene? Very good chapter